The Official Writing Challenge
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I loved this piece right up until the end. I think it could have stopped with the swim- BUT- I also like the idea of the other part of this story- I know our word count is limited, but it seemed a little jarred. That said, I got caught in the story right away and loved how the moment of epiphany came right in the middle of something so 'ordinary'. Isn't that how it really happens? to me anyway. I really enjoyed this. Good work!
02/22/07
I like your title. Your whole story fits together so well - it seems like the water itself (soothing, steady, safe, sure). The end added to that whole aura. Well done.
02/22/07
Wow! I loved the mention of her insecurities followed by her transformation, "finding herself". This is so powerful, so hopeful. The ending made me a bit teary, but in a good way. Loved it.
You communicated the insecurities and deep emotions so well. The In out, in, out, was very effective. The twist at the end wasn't as satisfying as the ending I had hoped for, but then neither is life always. Great job.
02/28/07
Oh, those meaningful moments in our lives that we carry with us always. Beautiful.
03/01/07
Congrats, Beth! You did it again! :)