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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Sport or Fitness (02/15/07)

TITLE: Blood Sport
By Sue Dent
02/18/07


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Blood Sport

He couldn’t believe it. The punishment was far too extreme, in his opinion. He’d be dead himself in a matter of time if things were left as they were. Everyone would be looking for him. Everyone would be out to kill him. The blood sport would be on.

Oh, the irony, he thought. No one had actually ever taken the initiative to strike another down. No one had actually killed anyone. But now he was a marked man. He tried to reason with his punisher, even begged.

“You must see how unfair this is? You have to know everyone will be out to get me? You didn’t like what I did yet now that the deed has been done, you’ve sort of left the door open for it to happen again. No one will want me around after this. They’ll all want to kill me!”

Would it work? He had no idea. Was he his brother’s keeper? Of course he was. Yet he’d let his jealousy over his brother being favored eat at him and eat at him—it ate at him until the idea to do away with him overwhelmed. It seemed like a good idea at the time. How would anyone know?

He hadn’t counted on his brother’s blood calling out from the ground. How could he? No one had ever been killed before. Oh but was he to be pitied now! He would have to walk the earth as a vagabond, driven from this place he’d called home. His father’s punishment was one thing. But this—how would he ever survive as a farmer when the earth would no longer yield anything to him?

Speaking to the One punishing for perhaps the very last time, he still couldn’t think of anyone but himself. Even with his the blood of his brother crying from the ground, he continued to think only of himself and not about what drove him to kill.

And he’d been such a disappointment to his family. They’d thought that he might be the Savior. The one sent to correct his father’s sin. And now look what he’d become and all because of his jealousy. His brother’s offering was considered better than his.

He said it again. “You’ve made hunting me a blood sport. How shall I ever survive?”

The response was a protective mark to identify him as the one who had killed, a promise that vengeance should be taken sevenfold on anyone who tried to do the same to him.

Never asking for forgiveness, never really considering what he’d done except for the extent of his punishment, Cain left.


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Sara Harricharan 02/22/07
Ironic indeed. What a different look on the story of Cain. I thought it was pretty interesting and definitely quite different from anything I've read about him before. The title, Blood Sport, was a bit unusual, but I think it fits. Nice job.
Brenda Craig02/22/07
How clever! You took an age-old, told hundreds of times story and found a whole new way of portraying it. Your rendition abounds with Cain's pride sarcasm, insolence, and above all an unwillingness to look at his own heart.

May we never be like Cain. Quite a unique perspective on the story. I enjoyed it immensely. Excellent!
Joanney Uthe02/24/07
Great twist on the topic. I really like the title and the unique POV for such a familiar story. One minor typo, but very well written. I enjoyed the contrast between Cain's unrepentant, selfish attitude and God's mercy extended to him anyway.
Betty Castleberry02/24/07
This definitely set a somber and solitary mood for me.
You did a great job of "getting into" Cain's head. Well done.
Joanne Sher 02/24/07
I just LOVE how you gave this story a completely different perspective.I had never thougth about Cain in this way. This is extremely well written.
Shari Armstrong 02/24/07
Wow - what a powerful piece -definitely makes you think about Cain and Abel in a new light.
Patty Wysong02/24/07
Wow. I've never thought about life from Cain's perspective. I thought you captured him well, too. Your last line "never asking forgiveness" was so sad, true, but sad and left me wondering what if he had asked for forgiveness...
Jacquelyn Horne02/24/07
Yes, this is certainly a unique approach to this familiar story. I had never thought about Cain's "I still feel sorry for Cain" attitude. Good job.
Allison Egley 02/24/07
Wow. As many others have said, this is such a unique take on the story of Cain! I never thought about his parents thinking he was the Savior. How interesting. I too, found it interesting that Cain still focused so much on himself after his deed, but I suppose that's what sin does to all of us.
Helen Paynter02/24/07
Oh, I enjoyed this. First I enjoyed piecing together who it was (and yes, I did get it before you gave it away!) Then I enjoyed the perspective and the really unusual angle you told it from. Most of all, I loved the throw-away line about Adam and Eve hoping he might be the Saviour. Never thought of it like that, but I bet they did. Great. Thank you for something really new to consider.
Jan Ackerson 02/25/07
This is really, really good. For me, the kicker was in the last paragraph--he was only sorry to the extent that he was being punished. How like Cain we still are!
Donna Emery02/28/07
I was definitely surprised at this POV. A real original, and it is so skillfully written. Thanks for sharing this
Marilee Alvey02/28/07
I have heard that Cain's parents were expecting a Savior. I have heard that Cain was self-centered, but what you've done here is seen, first and foremost, in your title. BLOOD SPORT: how up to date is this? At first, I read it as if it were a modern story. I love when people fool me like this! You have given me...and, by the sound of it, the rest of your readers, several AHA! moments in this story. That is the mark of an excellent Christian writer! Well written, creative, innovative, with AHA moments.....let's see....I think this has all the elements for being a standout! Well done, Sue!
Bonnie Way03/14/07
Good story. I love it when writers give us a new perspective into an old story, or a twist to a Biblical story. I really liked how you portrayed Cain's emotions and self-centredness.