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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Craft (as in handcraft) (02/08/07)

TITLE: Intertwined
By Joanne Malley



One day beyond the pearly gates
The Lord our God rejoiced,
Another child would walk the earth
And this is what He voiced…

“My hands, like tools will mold your form
With threads of Heaven’s fleece,
Each stitch I make, each part I craft
Reveals a masterpiece.”

“Until you’re born no one can see
The parts that I’ve combined,
And you will bear all that you need -
Three pieces intertwined.”

“The first – your heart, will beat with love
One’s given every man,
Though how you choose to nurture it
Remains in your own hands.”

“The next – your mind, will hold the thoughts
Of what is right and true,
But if you disregard each one
My eyes will cry for you.”

“The third – your soul, is empty ‘til
You recognize I’m there,
It’s then your being comes to life
And heaven sings this prayer…”

“It’s with great pride we do proclaim
Your fabric is elite,
Exalted is our Lord and God
For He’s made you complete.”

“Who you’ll become was meant to be
No other’s quite the same,
He took the time to craft just one
And now you’ll bear His name.”

“He placed you in your mother’s womb
And as you grew He beamed,
Your every part turned out just right -
Exactly how He dreamed.”

And, then the angels bowed to God
They praised His work that day,
He sat upon His splendid throne
And had these words to say…

“With hands like tools, I molded you
Of heart and soul and mind,
Creator and his masterpiece -
Forever intertwined.”

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Karen Deikun02/15/07
This was beautiful.
Verna Cole Mitchell 02/15/07
This is a wonderful poem, "crafted" with exactly the right words and message!
Betty Castleberry02/15/07
This is just beautiful. That's all I have to say....
Barbara Hartsook02/15/07
Thank you... I'm printing it out to reread in the quiet mornings.
Joanne Sher 02/16/07
Absolutely beautiful. This is a keeper - a masterpiece.
Mariane Holbrook 02/16/07
This is so beautiful. There should be another Challenge level beyond Master's and you should be in it.
Amy Michelle Wiley 02/17/07
At the risk of sounding like a broken record, I'll also say this was beautiful. Lovely job.
william price02/17/07
Extremely pretty piece of poetry:)
Loved the message, the word choices, the craft. Excellent. God bless.
Jacquelyn Horne02/19/07
When you wait so long to read, there no comment left to make. But, as a poetry lover, this is a "keeper".
Sally Hanan02/19/07
Excellent rhyming skills in use here. This poem conveys many healing truths for those who believe they were an accident. If they drank this in, they'd see how much went into their creation. You were definitely inspired :)
Kenn Allan02/19/07
Wow... this is beautiful!
Pat Guy 02/21/07
Way to stretch Jo! (kinda missing your humorous pieces you know!)

Your message matches your word choices and I think many will be blessed. Loved it.
Donna Powers 02/21/07
So very well done. I don't have the words to say how much I like this. Excellent! Thanks for sharing it
Tabiatha Tallent02/21/07
Beautiful. Your rhyme and meter is wonderful. Thanks for sharing.
Jan Ackerson 02/21/07
I'll echo everything that was said here, and add that I really loved the framing of the poem's title and its last word. When I started to read, I was thinking that the 3 parts are intertwined, but then you added extra depth to the intertwining in the last stanza--just awesome.
Beth Muehlhausen02/21/07
I'll tell you the first word that came to mind after reading this: gentle! I felt the gentleness of the Maker's hand resting on me, the gentleness of being wrought with love and defined by and intwined with Him.

Lovely. Just lovely.
Myrna Noyes02/21/07
Lovely, lovely poem!! :)
Loren T. Lowery02/21/07
Truly, this had to be inspired - from God's heart to your hand.
Julie Arduini02/21/07
You can feel God's anointing all over this work. Touching, beautiful, just lovely.
Laurie Glass 02/21/07
What a lovely poem. I thought of this take myself, but I'm glad I went with something else - couldn't have competed with yours. :)
Sue Dent02/21/07
Okay, ummmm, I had to add another SCREEEN just to leave a comment. And my guess is, they'll have to add another very soon!!!! I've read so many things like this BUT not like this! It makes all the other things I've read like this--seem like child's play!!! Perfect! Absolutely perfect.
william price02/22/07
I know I'm risking sounding like a "suck-up", but congratulations on your very pretty Audrey Hepburn poem. I'm very glad for you. God bless.