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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Gone Fishing (02/01/07)

TITLE: Diemos and Hektor's Unexcellent Adventure
By Lynda Lee Schab
02/07/07


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It was a great day for fishing. Diemos grinned wickedly as he steered the little boat toward the spot to which he’d been assigned, where the fish were really known to bite. He definitely needed to reel some in today. At least if he wanted to please his boss, Ba’al, which, of course, he did.

He licked his lips in anticipation. Everything was perfect. Except for---

“Hey Boss? Are we there yet?”

Hektor.

Diemos shot his annoying sidekick a sideways glance. He’d been forced to drag the little vermin along as punishment for not reaching his quota last month. It was all because of those sneaky Angels of Light. They weren’t playing fair – they kept stealing his fishing spots! But his boss would hear none of his excuses and he’d assigned the stupid kid to him.

“Yes Hektor,” Diemos said sardonically. “We’re almost there.”

Hektor stood and jumped up and down, clapping his hand together. “Oh Boy! I can’t wait – I’ve never been fishing before!”

“Sit down, you imbecile! You’re going to tip the boat!”

“Sorry, Boss.” Hektor sat but still squirmed anxiously.

Diemos rolled his eyes and concentrated on his destination. Once there, he killed the motor and the boat drifted.

“What are we going to use as bait, Boss?”

“The usual - Fame. Riches. Lust. Greed…” Diemos’s eyes glazed over. “Don’t you just love the sound of that?

Hektor nodded, enthusiastically.

“Now, do what I do, Hektor. Bait your hook then dangle it over the water, like this. Tease them with it. Let them nibble for a minute then jerk on the line – HARD! Make sure they’re hooked. Then we’ll reel them in and eat them for dinner.” Diemos cackled and broke into a loud, hacky cough.

“You okay, Boss?” Hektor asked, pounding Diemos on the back.

“Get away from me you stench-soaked slime!” Diemos gave Hektor a shove, and the boat rocked violently. “Now shut up before you scare them all away!”

An hour later, Hektor yawned. “Hey, Boss? I’m hungry. Did we bring snacks?”

“Our snacks are down there, you idiot!” Diemos hissed and pointed into the water. Could the kid really be that ignorant?

Diemos's stomach growled. He couldn’t deny he was getting hungry too. He smacked his lips and jiggled the bait some more. A couple of unsuspecting prey swam dangerously close to the hook. Stupid people! Lust and greed were much too appealing to resist. Salivating, Diemos prepared to yank on the hook.

“Psst. Hey Boss,” Hektor whispered, breaking Diemos’s concentration.

“Shut…UP!” Diemos seethed.

“But Boss…”

“Hektor,” Diemos closed his eyes and tried to speak calmly. “We are on the verge of hooking our prey. Do…NOT….spoil….it.”

Diemos opened his eyes and was suddenly blinded by a bright light. “What the---“

Out of nowhere, a huge charter fishing boat appeared, its headlights piercing the darkness. Diemos barely had time to shriek before the boat rammed them, sending their tiny row boat into the air.

Diemos and Hektor landed with a splash.

“I tried to tell you, Boss,” Hektor gurgled as he struggled to keep his head above the water.

“ARGH! Those blasted Angels of Light found us again. And our boat is no match for theirs!” Diemos spat. He righted the boat and climbed in.

“We could surrender, boss! Here, wave these!” Hektor called. Something cold and wet flew through the air and landed against Diemos’s face with a splat.

Hektor’s underwear! That ignorant morsel of poison seriously thought surrendering to the Light was an option! Even if he were to surrender, he would never in eternity use a slimy, mold-infested pair of Hektor’s underwear to do it!

Diemos peeled the underwear from his face and flung them back into the water. He debated whether or not to leave Hektor to fend for himself. Reluctantly, he pulled him up into the boat, clawing him a couple of times for good measure.

Diemos started the motor as Hektor stood, dripping wet, observing the charter boat with obvious fascination. “Hey boss. It looks like they’re already having better luck than we did! They’re reeling them in one after the other. But they’re using different bait. They’re catching ‘em with,” Hektor squinted, “Grace...mercy...and forgiveness.”

"Oh, my ears!" Diemos shrieked.

Hektor's lip trembled as he comprehended the words he'd just spoken. "I've got a lot to learn, don't I boss?"

Diemos shook his head, disgusted. The pathetic, excuse for a demon didn't have a clue.


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Jacqueline Zerres02/08/07
What an excellent adventure for me! Shades of C.S. Lewis. What a fun take on the subject and hurrah for the victors!
Jan Ackerson 02/10/07
I love it! And I grinned at the underwear bit...do demons wear boxers or briefs? This is funny and deep at the same time, very well done.
william price02/10/07
Very creative and enjoyable. I'm glad your back. Excellent job. God bless.
Pat Guy 02/10/07
Oh Lynda! Lynda! Lynda! How refreshingly different, intertaining and funny. I would have guessed and KNOWN this was yours anyway. Another WOW to add to the prequel. Kudos girl! ;)
Ann Grover02/10/07
Too funny! AND deep. So the next time I am discouraged or tempted, I should remember that I am being tormented by the likes of Hektor and Diemos... oh, that's rich! And it may help! Thanks!
Sally Hanan02/10/07
You mean there are undies worse than those my family throws in the washbasket?? :D
Lots of fun, and as Pat said, this has Lynda written all over it :)
Sheri Gordon02/10/07
This was great. I've done a lot of fishing, so next time I get tempted to do wrong, I'll just picture these two bafoons dangling their bait over me ... so pretty, so attractive, but so deadly.
Betty Castleberry02/10/07
What FUN!! I'm grinning like the Cheshire cat. This is very creative. The two demons really came to life for me. Excellent job.
Joanne Malley02/11/07
Whoooo...very sinister! A truly blatant way to get your point across. Terrific story and well-conceived characters. Wonderful! This just may be another winner. :) Blessings, Jo
Shari Armstrong 02/11/07
Hehehe... too funny! I could see it all.
Sara Harricharan 02/12/07
I so have to love this! You had me laughing through the whole thing once I figured who the two MC's were. Hektor sounds like the little sort of fellow that always ends up being the scapegoat. Great job with this, I like the creativity here and the storyline was very entertaining! ^_^
Jacquelyn Horne02/14/07
All of the above! The whole time I was reading this my mind was acting it out in a "skit". Sure would make a good one, with a good pov. Teens would love it, and so would adults.