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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Gone Fishing (02/01/07)

TITLE: Finding Neutrino
By william price


He spent fourteen years hunting for the secrets of the universe 2500 meters under the Antarctic icecap. Wolfgang Armbruster had worked most of his adult life fishing with the largest telescope on ice for the most elusive particle in the universe.

The forty-six year old scientist ran his rough fingers through his shaggy graying hair. He gazed out of his window at the blurred images of the Buenos Aires' Aeropuerto Internacional, as his jet roared down the runway. It was a long flight to Miami, and he was looking forward to a nice nap. Sitting next to him was a six-inch thick journal titled, A.M.A.N.D.A.. The aisle seat was occupied by a woman in her mid-twenties.

"So, how long have you been working down in Antarctica?" The woman's voice was sharp and genuine.

The question startled Wolfgang. "Is it that obvious?"

The woman laughed. "I'd say there are a few clues. The red, weather-beaten face, except for the white goggle-shaped circles around your eyes and your haggard beard are two indicators. You add to that a large notebook with an acronym on its cover, and I figure you've either been working on the icecap or hunting Yeti in the mountains."

Wolfgang cracked a smile. "I'd say you're pretty perceptive, young lady. I spent most of the past fourteen years on Antarctica." He cast a gaze at his inquisitor. "You a college student?"

"No, sir, I was down in Buenos Aires visiting my father. He's a missionary."

"That's interesting. What's your name?"

The woman giggled and smiled. "Amanda."

"You're kidding!"

"No, sir. That's my name. I've been dying to find out what that notebook is about. What does the acronym stand for?"

Wolfgang sighed. ""The Antarctic Muon and Neutrino Detector Array."

"Okay, now what does it mean?"

The scientist shook his head and smiled. "You're going to make me talk this entire flight, aren't you?"

"Oh yes, sir. I hate to fly.

"Call me, Wolfgang, then. ‘Sir’ makes me feel old."

"It's a deal, sir. I mean, Wolfgang. That's a very scientific name."

"Probably because my father, Wolfgang, was a scientist, and his father's name was Wolfgang."

"Was he a scientist too?"

"No, he was a goat herder, but I was told he looked scientific."

They both laughed.

"So what exactly do you do?" Amanda asked.

"I fish."

"Is a neu-trino a fish?"

"No, no. I've been fishing for secrets to the universe."

"In Antarctica?"

"Yes, deep under the ice even, with a telescope."

"That's kind of backwards, Wolfgang, but cool. You're searching for the secrets of Heaven inside the earth. And you are using an instrument that was designed to look outward, to examine inward. That could almost preach."

Wolfgang looked puzzled.

"Forget it. It's just something my father says. So, what's a neutrino then?"

"It's a very energetic particle that is virtually undetectable. It doesn't have any mass or electric charge. One hundred trillion neutrinos pass through your body every second and you never know it. "

"Why would you search for something you cannot see or feel, and is for the most part, invisible?"

"A scientist hates what he can't measure, but at the same time, is challenged to do so. Neutrinos are formed by some very powerful cosmic engine. Outer space is about 90 percent of things we cannot see. Neutrinos are part of that mystery. If we can understand them, we might find hidden clues to the universe."

"Why search under the icecap?"

"Because it has little or no radiation to interfere with our detectors. You see, the earth blocks out the neutrinos with the highest energy, allowing the low energy particles to pass through. And then, about once a second, a neutrino collides with an atom and produces a subatomic particle that produces light. Our instruments can magnify the light one billion times."

“Do you have any pictures of those light explosions?"

Wolfgang quickly leafed through his notebook and showed Amanda a computer-enhanced image.

Amanda's mouth fell open. "Wolfgang, that's amazing."

"Yes, it is."

"No, I mean, don't you see the face of Jesus?"

The scientist looked again, and his eyes widened with amazement.

"My God."

"Exactly," Amanda exclaimed. "Your search of the invisible led you to its creator."

Wolfgang was silent for a moment and turned his gaze toward Amanda.

"I guess I'll be asking you questions the rest of the flight, miss missionary's daughter."

"Imagine that." Amanda smiled and pulled out a small Bible from her purse.

Footnotes: Romans 1:20 "For since the creation of the world God's invisible qualities--his eternal power and divine nature--have been clearly seen, being understood from what has been made, so that men are without excuse."

Col 1:15,16 "He is the image of the invisible God, the firstborn over all creation. For by him all things were created: things in heaven and on earth, visible and invisible, whether thrones or powers or rulers or authorities; all things were created by him and for him."

All scriptures NIV.

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Joanne Malley02/10/07
Now this is one VERY creative story that comprises, intellect, wonder, and meaning. I love the connection between the unseen particles and God. Very clever. Great job from a great writer! Blessings, Jo
Jan Ackerson 02/10/07
Your search of the invisible led you to its creator

What a great line!

I also really like the title with its subtle nod to "Finding Nemo." This could easily have slipped into the realm of scientific mumbo-jumbo, but it didn't and it was compelling reading all the way through.
Pat Guy 02/10/07
I LOVED the ending! And I loved the natural flow of converstaion - I felt I was evesdropping! ;)

'Cool' take on the topic, creative and informative without being 'teachy.' I LOVE info and you pulled this off VERY WELL William!
Betty Castleberry02/10/07
Oh, wow. I really, really liked this. It held my attention from the first word to the last. Excellent!
Ann Grover02/10/07
"Outer space is about 90 percent of things we cannot see."

He's answering his own questions about faith before he will ask... I appreciated that this didn't lose me with a lot of scientific lingo... I've already looked it up and found out there's a neutrino observatory in Canada and two kinds of neutrinos and... Thanks for a fascinating read... and story from the other Pole.
Sally Hanan02/10/07
Really interesting stuff, and I'm glad that this guy got to hear the Gospel in spite of his 14 years of directing his search away from God. Good piece of wriitng.
Joanney Uthe02/10/07
I love to hear stories of scientists who discover real Truth. (My husband's family all have science degrees) Great story. Held my interest throughout.
Sheri Gordon02/10/07
This is really good. The conversation is so natural. I like the use of Wolfgang -- such a classic scientific name.
Laurie Glass 02/11/07
What a cool story with a profound message. Great job.
Elizabeth Baize02/11/07
This was incredible! You even made the scientific part of the dialogue so interesting! I also love how the story has a somewhat disguised "fishers of men" aspect.
Catrina Bradley 02/12/07
Excellent! Great dialog and great message, VERY well written. One of my favorites.
terri tiffany02/12/07
Great job! Lots of good detail with a great ending - I was afraid too I wouldn't be able to follow but you pulled it back just in time and did a great job.
Leigh MacKelvey02/12/07
I enjoyed this thoroughly and I am NOT a science person! My brother-in-lwa is a scientist and Wolfgang reminded me so much of him! Now he is a Christian after years of telling me "There is no scientifc proof." Yeah! And Yeah for your great writing!
Leigh MacKelvey02/12/07
OOps! I'm not a typing person,either! Wish we could edit these things. (brother-in-law)
cindy yarger02/13/07
Captivating from the first. The conversation was light hearted and natural. An enjoyable read. Great job!
Chrissi Dunn02/13/07
Enjoyed the Science lesson, and the message that God can be seen in the unseen.
Cheri Hardaway 02/13/07
Awesome! Gotta love the Divine Appointment! Blessings, Cheri
Sara Harricharan 02/13/07
I like this very much. So interesting to read and Wolfgang made a delightful character! ^_^
Jacquelyn Horne02/14/07
With all the above comments, there's not much left to say. But I like the unusual way the door was opened here to share salvation. Good writing.
terri tiffany02/15/07
Congrats again Bill!!! Great job:)
Barbara Hartsook02/15/07
WOW... I'd like to give this to my grandkids, who love story. This once reaches its mark!
Helen Paynter02/15/07
Great story, William. Congratulations.
Allison Egley 02/15/07
Oh, this was great. I too loved the ending. Congrats on a well deserved win!
Edy T Johnson 02/15/07
SirWilliam, this is so good, I could just explode! I think you need to quit your day job and devote full time to writing, so all the world will know. Your parables do such an excellent job in getting out the Word. Congratulations on your win!