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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Gone Fishing (02/01/07)

TITLE: River's Prize
By Joanne Malley
02/06/07


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Riverís Prize


With good intent, I cast my net
and sought the riverís prize,
Unknown to me the sea I sailed
was meant for souls unwise.

Then, suddenly a storm arose
with fierce iniquity,
How was I caught without a plan
against this wicked sea?

My vessel failed to shelter me
from whirling winds and rain,
I then became the helpless bait
of evilís wicked game.

The waves had crashed upon each side
relentlessly they slammed,
And though I hoped to make it through
my soul knew I was damned.

Despite desires to catch a wave
of reassuring peace,
I found my boat without the strength
to make the stormís rage cease.

Did I belong here in this boat
designed by human hands?
Or did the Captain near the shore
create the perfect plans?

I sensed this wasnít where to fish
for wisdom, truth or love,
Nor was this boat a way to reach
the prize that I dreamed of.

I knew without the Captainís help
my net would never hold,
The things that I was searching for -
A savior once foretold.

I thought that I should change my course
to find a better way,
Or was it wise to jump my boat
and let it go astray?

ďOh, yes itís wise,Ē He did reply
ďJust swim across to me,
Youíll find the One to help you float -
Iíll guard youíre destiny.Ē

ďI came to teach you how to build
a strong and mighty boat,
But if you donít accept my aid
youíre surely not to float.Ē

ďFor thereís no storm you wonít survive
no winds can take you down,
Just yield to me; surrender all
I promise you wonít drown.Ē

ďOh, God, Iíd love to have a ship
thatís safe and strong like yours,
Iíll take the route laid out for me
that leads to tranquil shores.Ē

So, I released my net and boat
they sank into the sand,
for now my refuge lay within
the grasp of Jesusí hand.

No longer shall I sail the seas
that man has come to lust,
since now my boat is chartered by
the One Iíve come to trust.

I fish no more to find the things
that man has languished for,
itís in my search Iíve recognized
my Captainís golden ore.

You see, my prize was never found
In waters known to man,
Itís in the realm of things divine
within His holy plan.

With good intent, I cast my net
To find those lost at sea,
My Captainís there to guide our way
prepared to take the lead.


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Jan Ackerson 02/10/07
Wonderful, Jo! I really liked these two stanzas:

I thought that I should change my course
to find a better way,
Or was it wise to jump my boat
and let it go astray?

ďOh, yes itís wise,Ē He did reply
ďJust swim across to me,
Youíll find the One to help you float -
Iíll guard youíre destiny.Ē


...because sometimes what we must do is just NOT the thing that makes sense to us. We want to hang on to the sinking boat...

Well, no sense in me preaching what your poem so wonderfully taught. Great, great job.
william price02/10/07
Yowsers, Jo! I knew I was missing something the past six months. Excellent job. I've been in that boat before, and where I thought words could not describe, you found them. Superb. Glad to see you back. God bless.
Betty Castleberry02/10/07
This has a wonderful messsage, and it's SO beautifully written. A modern day psalm, for sure. Excellent!!
Pat Guy 02/10/07
Way to go Jo!

Easy flow, a great read and a great message we all can relate to. Welcome back girlfrin! :)
Sally Hanan02/10/07
Beautiful truths the whole way through this, and congrats on making this rhyme so well :) I know it's not as easy as it looks.
Sheri Gordon02/10/07
I loved this. I have experienced being in a boat with waves crashing, wondering if we were going to make it to shore alive. Reading those words in your poem, applying them to life, is so descriptive and real to me. And the thought of staying in a sinking boat ... wow, you really hit it.
Lynda Lee Schab 02/12/07
I love poems that have such a wonderful, smooth flow that makes it easy to get sucked into the story without getting distracted by the choppiness. Yours did this effortlessly. The rhyme was dead on and the message was too - deep stuff. :-)Excellent job.
Leigh MacKelvey02/12/07
Just too many wonders in this poem to list! Beautiful job.
Cheri Hardaway 02/13/07
This was one of my favorite stanzas: No longer shall I sail the seas
that man has come to lust,
since now my boat is chartered by
the One Iíve come to trust.

Beautiful job! Blessings, Cheri
Jacquelyn Horne02/14/07
I really liked this! Good meter and good pov. I hope you write poetry often.
Venice Kichura02/14/07
This is exceptional! Masterfully written poem (that flows beautifully) with heartfelt message of what's important in life.
Barbara Hartsook04/24/07
What a beautiful poem. I have added it to my favorites. Who cannot relate to its theme? Or to the blessing of taking God's hand to guide? When the storms threaten, and only God remains, it's good to know you're known by Him.

Your poetry flows perfectly -- no stumbling to get the meter to fit the thought. Thank you for sharing it.
Judy Wilson04/21/08
This is absolutely beautiful, every thought. There is such beauty in truth !