The Official Writing Challenge
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I like the way you described the scene. Though using only objects, we still get a picture of the relationship between Grandfather and Grandchild.
This is very sweet. You painted a very visual scene. Nicely done.
Utterly fantastic!!!!! Yes, five exclamation points. I dislike any poetry that isn't rhymed, until today; yours is just perfect, so much said in so few words; almost like a picture painted for us with nothing more needed. Got the picture Loud and Clear. Just Beautiful! A Winner in my book! Can't get over my own change of thought about did it! Beautimous!
I am usually not a big fan of poetry either, particularly when it doesn't rhyme. I often have a hard time "finding the meaning". But this is really, really good. I'm glad I kept reading -- you painted a beautiful picture.