The Official Writing Challenge
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Good message though I thought the ending wrapped up abit quick. Loved the dialogue and the way you used the topic!:)
I found this very endearing with the dialect. Great job and a sweet story...just like the tea. LOL Blessings, Jo
Hotter'n a fresh-fried-fox in a forest far

For that line alone, I'd give you the top prize! And the rest of this is equally delightful.
Great dialogue, atmosphere (flat as Florida?) ;) and character - and a great message to boot! Well done Venice! Way to wrap up a 'slice of life' story.
Loved the dialect, the message. Do you know people who talk like that? Absolutely priceless. Made my day. Thank you...
Cute story :) I notice you didn't mention the condition of the toilet.... :)
Loved the message! I had to read it a couple of times to understand all of the dialogue -- you did a good job with that.
I loved this - refreshingly funny and sweet with a great message woven in. Good work!
Wow, well done. Great job on the dialect.
Great job with the dialect! Made me want to read it out loud with a bit of Louisiana twang! And the message of the story was priceless. Well done. Blessings, Cheri
Good message. Now if we just all heed it.