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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Gone Fishing (02/01/07)

TITLE: Still See It In Their Eyes
By Laurie Glass
02/02/07


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My dad, a master fisherman,
He taught me all the tricks he knew.
Looked forward to those Saturdays,
Our time together, just us two.

We’d dig up worms and pack our rods,
Get all prepared the night before.
So hard to wake, enjoyed my sleep,
But I liked fishin’ even more.

Inhaled the fresh, crisp, morning air,
Enjoyed the sunrise, solitude…
With baited hooks and wat’ring mouths,
Looked forward to our supper food.

We’d sit real quiet on that bank,
But when my line was wiggling,
I’d get excited, carry on,
And couldn’t stop my giggling.

Still picture Dad’s blue dancing eyes
So full of happiness and pride…
Unfair his life was cut so short,
Was still in school when he died.

Those weekend mornings weren’t the same
Without my dad on that old bank,
But still went fishin’, never stopped…
Was quiet, gave me time to think.

I took a likin’ to a girl
And asked if she would fish with me.
She hesitated just a bit,
But once she pondered, did agree.

I offered worms, she sat so still,
Her lovely eyes were filled with fear.
I couldn’t understand just why…
She handed me the pole, said, “Here.”

Thereafter, baited all her hooks,
I guess those worms gave her the creeps,
She’d make a face and look away,
But joined me fishin’ ev’ry week.

We didn’t catch that many fish,
But talked and laughed a lot instead…
Her eyes just captivated me,
They spoke to me the words unsaid.

We later married, had three sons,
And took them fishin, sure enough.
Remember how much fun we had,
Still see their grins and eyes lit up.

The years we spent on that old bank,
Just like my dad had done with me…
Imagined him with my three boys,
And I could see him smiling.

My sons grew up and moved away...
Although I missed them, I must say
That fishin’ with my lovely wife
Was special still, and made my day.

We’d reminisce about the years,
It’s like we fell in love again…
With eyes to melt this fellow’s heart,
I treasured my sweet love, my friend.

We talked and laughed on that old bank,
Still never baited her own hook.
It may sound silly, but I was
Still captivated by her look.

When sickness came, it broke my heart…
I know she fought with all her might,
But nothing more that could be done,
She slipped away from me one night.

I still go fishin’ when I can,
Relieves the ache down in my soul
That sometimes overtakes my heart,
Goes deeper than this fishin’ hole.

When I come back to this old bank,
Enjoy the quiet, feel the breeze,
Get lost in the serenity,
And bask in my sweet memories.

Remember hours I’ve spent here,
Still see my dad’s blue dancing eyes,
Three boys whose looks still lift my heart,
Wife’s eyes that gazed deep into mine.

Reflect at this old fishin’ hole,
I smile, sometimes shed a tear.
Yes, this is where I feel the best,
For on this bank, I feel they’re near.


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Verna Cole Mitchell 02/08/07
I loved the sweet emotion and memories in this poem. Good job!
Julie Arduini02/08/07
This was so tender and well done. You nailed this one!
Virginia Gorg02/10/07
Heartfelt - I like the way you weave the whole life into a short poem. Conveys a sense of love and peace. Nice job :)
william price02/11/07
Oh yes! Very moving and excellently done. Life brings its challenges, but the river bank is always there. I really liked this and I'm very glad I got to read it. God bless.
Pat Guy 02/11/07
Wow - a lifetime in such few words!

You captured the tenderness of this heart - of the loves in his life. Very well done to do that. Easy flow and easy to connect with - Kudos on this one girl! :)
Jan Ackerson 02/11/07
Perfectly lovely, both heartbreaking and heartwarming at the same time.
Joanney Uthe02/11/07
I loved the journey through life and the emotions of each stage. Great job.
Sharlyn Guthrie02/11/07
You did a great job of winding a life story around the theme. Peace and contentment seemed to reign in every life phase. Nice job!
Sheri Gordon02/11/07
Very nice. I felt like I was living your character's emotions with him. What a sweet story.
cindy yarger02/12/07
Nicely done. I feel like I've been out on a walk with you as you talked me through your years. A good tribute to lives that touched you and were touched by you.
terri tiffany02/15/07
Terrific how you said so much in such a great way!! I loved how each person was added on and also the light cute moments:) Very nice!