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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Reading (01/25/07)

TITLE: Son of the Commandment
By Pat Guy


Rain! O Holy Rain! Ancient Words washed over Him like rain. O how He thirsted! O how He drank under the reading of His Father’s Words written so long ago … O so long ago; when Their Spirits soared as one … when the Angels sang of that day – the day of no more tears.

Holy Fire blazed from the deepest chambers of His being – He must keep the Rabbi reading, for only this Rain could quench the burning in His chest. Yet the day was cool in the Temple courts.

Questions begat answers from The Writings. Questions begat more Words – more Rain. His understanding beyond that of learned Scholars. More … He craved more. Please read more.

He closed His eyes, and Holy Wind carried Him into His Father’s Presence and, O how He longed to stay! Father, I miss You, I love You.

Then … as transition kindled His sweet soul, His young eyes awoke to an awareness – the last touch of childhood lifted its veil of innocent fragility and … He knew. Abba, Abba Father, may I stay? Here among Your Words … until…?

Holy Wind caressed one reluctant tear, and clouds covered the warm sun.

A voice, familiar, quickened an affection silenced during those illuminating days and he turned to see His mother scurrying up stone layers to reach Him.

“Son! O my Son! Why have You treated us like this? Your father and I have been anxiously searching for You!”

“Why were you searching for me?” He asked. “Didn’t you know I had to be in my Father’s house?”

He then went down to Nazareth with His parents and was obedient unto them.

And Jesus grew in wisdom and stature, and in favor with God and man.

Holy Rain, Holy Fire, Holy Wind carried Him on His long journey … carried Him into the last awakening … the last transition; when last He touched Earth … and went Home.

Father? How long … until …?

And the Angels broke forth in song.

Based upon the passage of Luke 2:41-52

*Author’s note: It wasn’t until many centuries later Jewish culture created the Bar Mitzvah and the Bat Mitzvah as transition into adulthood for boys and girls. Although children were raised according to Deuteronomy 6:7 “And you shall teach it to your children …”* they were not expected to keep the 613 commandments (mitzvot) God gave to the Jews until this spiritual awakening and accountability was placed upon them at the age of 12 and 13yrs.

The literal translation for Bar Mitzvah is, ‘son of the commandment.’

Side note: Boys could ask to stay under more intense, deep study of The Writings. This deep study was called Derash.

*The Torah


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Shari Armstrong 02/01/07
Very very cool (was just talking about the bat mmitzpha for the girl I used to nanny and her sister's coming up this spring!
Sally Hanan02/01/07
It took me a few read-throughs to get this - but maybe that's because I was speed-reading... :D If there was any critique, I'd say to cut back on your O/Ohs. I liked the passion for the Word and His desire to be with His Father - and how you brought me back to earth with a thump - kind of like the knock on my bedroom door when I have to stop praying.
Emotional stuff!
Amy Michelle Wiley 02/03/07
Very unique style. I like it!
Crista Darr02/05/07
Your writing conveys a spirit of worship. I love that! During this time in the temple, the people were in awe of Jesus, but I never considered the communion Jesus was having with His Father and the Scriptures. Lovely. This makes me want to run to my Bible.
Joanne Sher 02/05/07
Just beautiful. Definitely showed me, vividly, a perspective I had never even considered. Great atmosphere. I felt like I was right there.
Jan Ackerson 02/05/07
Pat, your writing astounds me--so rich and deep, so very beautiful.
Jen Davis02/05/07
This deserves at least a second read to fully appreciate. The opening is truly amazing and the writing is beautiful throughout. Such a unique perspective. Great work!
william price02/05/07
Such talent and anointing combined. Excellent. God bless.
Suzanne R02/05/07
I've been reading this (and other pieces) between doing my Bible study prep ... do the prep while waiting for the computer to go to the next page. But you've inspired me to switch the silly computer off and just immerse myself in Scripture ... maybe. You described beautifully that Holy Fire etc. Magnificent writing.
Allison Egley 02/05/07
Oh, this was good. One thing that was a bit confusing for me were all the capitalized nouns in the beginning. I had trouble figuring out "who was who" so to speak. I loved the ending, and how you went back to the words He spoke as a boy.
Venice Kichura02/06/07
WOW but this is exceptional! I love to read stories crafted from the Bible. You did a masterful job of protraying one of my favorites of young Jesus & his parents. This should place very high!
Linda Watson Owen02/06/07
Besides agreeing with all that has been said up to now, I must add that I love the poetic quality you've used in this evocative piece, Pat. So beautiful!
Ruth Neilson02/07/07
thank you for your insight on this topic--it has enlighted me on what is expected of a young Jewish man approaching his Bar Mitzvah. Thank you for sharing this beautiful entry!
Patty Wysong02/07/07
Beautiful!! I could feel His longing.
Julie Arduini02/07/07
This is a read you want to savor, take in slowly like a gourmet meal. It was worship, history and real for me. Excellent.
Myrna Noyes02/07/07
A truly "Master"-ful use of words! :) The beginning was so powerful and compelling that I felt my heart crying out with His for more! Loved the ending as well! Awesome all the way!
Donna Powers 02/07/07
Very interesting perspective and this information was very good to read. I enjoyed this and thanks for sharing it
Leigh MacKelvey02/07/07
The combination of poetic wording and prose MADE this piece to read as beautifully as it does. You used the information and research done
come alive and just shine! It was truly inspired writing. Personally, I woudn't change one thing.
Phyllis Inniss02/08/07
You've been inspired and richly so. It was a blessing to read this poetic piece of prose. Thank you.