The Official Writing Challenge
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02/03/07
Wow--you captured that one, precious epiphany in a wonderful way. Quite moving!

To get the italics, use <> instead of (). An easy fix, no big deal.

This is a really good piece, and a super way to use the topic word.
02/04/07
I love the angle you told this from - when I say 'angle' I mean more than a literary technique, because I actually felt I was standing begind the lectern beside the Son of God. Having said that, I think that in places you slipped into 'telling' rather than 'showing'. But a very enjoyabe read. Well done.