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02/01/07
Loved the iron and ice metaphor maintained throughout...and the gentle thawing by love and restored joy, even in the most surprising of ways. The grief process mustn't be denied...it's essential for complete healing...
You made be cry. There were a few minor tense issues at the beginning, I think, but this is a beautiful story. Well done.
02/01/07
This one made me teary.
02/01/07
This was wonderfully written from beginning to end. Although I never thought I would be laughing at the end of this piece. The last line was perfect! I can relate to this kind of grief and have seen joy restored in a very similar way. Great work!
02/01/07
This was an excellent illustration of how God will always have the final word even when we refuse to search His word. Great job in reflecting His enduring love, patience and mercy.
02/02/07
Wonderfully written story! I thoroughly enjoyed watching the transformation of Lissa's mom's heart!
02/02/07
What a beautiful story. You so skilfully interleaved pathos with laughter. I remember sitting in my mother-in-law's lounge the day my father-in-law had suddenly died and we cried and laughed in equal measure. The two are often mixed, and you did it so well. Brilliant, as usual.
This is an outstanding piece--a real example of "Show, don't tell." I found myself sharing the vivid emotions and appreciating the healing.
02/03/07
Absolutely LOVELY! Made me laugh and choke up. Love the metaphor too.
What a masterfully written piece, straight from the heart, bringing tears. I believe this is a winner!
I loved this story, a very honest portrayal of the grieving process. But I'm so glad that you let us in on the beginning of the healing process as well.
This was almost too private to read. I felt like I was invading protected territory but I was reluctant to leave.
We would all admit to saying
"But I was not speaking to its author, and I had no desire to read His book," if we were honest. But you were honest and I believe that's why God placed a silly book to break down your defenses, make you laugh again, and bring you home. It was a heartbreaking read, though, and I felt your angst all the way through it.
02/05/07
Neat story about loss and grief. Great title, and of course, "Masters Writer", exceptionally well written.
02/05/07
Certainly in the Master's Class. One feels the grief and the pain and allows for the petulance behind the words "But I was not speaking to its author, and I had no desire to read His book." But we are always happy that God finds a solution to our problems in even the most trivial things like a book of riddles. Thank you for sharing.
Good story. I could say all of the above, but I would like to say that the husband in this story deserves credit. Many spouses are not as understanding as he apparently was.
02/05/07
Awww! The ending was cute, practicing a pirate voice! I liked the title, so I clicked and ended up reading the whole story. Very nice, LOVED the riddles/jokes.
02/05/07
Jan, this is wonderful. It made me cry, even though I didn't want to. *sob*
02/05/07
Tender and beautiful - well done.
02/05/07
This ministered very well, besides being superbly crafted. I'm all too familiar with the topic. Think I'll read some riddles tonight. God bless.
02/05/07
This was really good. I love how it showed how our God loves to work in "Mysterious ways."
02/05/07
Great work here! Thanks for not getting too sentimental, you just got on with the story and didn't try to manipulate our emotions. I thought I was in with a chance this week, but after seeing the # of comments you have, I think you'll be at the top of the list :)
02/05/07
This is one of those the reader feels like wrapping their arms around to hold close - it reaches deep inside.

I can't beleive I didn't get back to this one because I sure read it and couldn't forget it. The title is perfect as is the writing of this story that reaches to the depths.

You do have a way Jan.
02/06/07
I feel like bursting out into applause. Bravo! A fantastic piece of writing.
How do you spell 'perfection'? Simply J-A-N!
02/07/07
So lovely and so enjoyable. Loved the jokes; loved the character; loved the story. Thanks so much for sharing this. I'm glad I didn't miss it!
02/07/07
Wonderful - great inside look at the process of grieving and healing.
02/07/07
Where's my tissues when I need one?! (yet, I don't feel you played up the emotions at all...) God reaches us where we are--even when we try to shut Him out. I loved the ending!
02/07/07
Absolutely amazing from beginning to end. I echo all the above comments, this was an emotional piece to read but not overdone. Just right!
Jan, your story would make a wonderful movie. As I read, I could see the scenes in my mind, especially sitting in numbness on the porch wrapped in a blanket and pouring a cup of coffee. I kept thinking of a Nicholas Spark book made into a movie. You have an excellant way of writing the reader into the mood.Classy!
02/08/07
Ahh, my favorite FW writer has done it again! Such a wonderful article -- should have known it was you! :) As I was judging this week, a few stood out from among the others. There's no question this was one of them. Congratulations once again. You never fail to amaze me with your imagination. You have an uncanny ability to capture a myriad of emotions catapulting the reader smack dab in the middle of a story in a few short 750 words. Awesome, Jan, awesome! :)
02/08/07
You probably don't need another comment (smile), but I have to, anyway. In taking the reader with you on your journey (done to perfection) you make us understand some of the terrible sense of loss (how could I ever endure having MY dearest treasure snatched away?!) and also the rejection of the One we need to blame. But, praise the Lord, you brought us through to discovery of a reality we all so often forget: just how much God really loves us, even though we still see it "through a glass, darkly." This goes in my "favorites," until I get the book with it inside. [I appreciate the time you take to add all your precious comments to my writing, too. Thank you, Friend!]
02/09/07
Jan, You are such a talented writer! To quote an old saying "Immitation is the sincerest form of flattery"...I want to write like you! Your words convey such emotion, depth of feeling, and life. You paint pictures with your words. Thank you for using the gift God has put in you!
God bless!