The Official Writing Challenge
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02/02/07
Well done! Loved the ending sentence.

My only suggestion would be to put the journal entries in italics, so that your narrator's thoughts after reading each journal entry are more clearly distinguished from Helen's words.

Very nice entry.
02/03/07
I lost the narrator's comments a little too, but got it worked out. Loved the story and could relate to it very much.
02/03/07
I like this line: Thereís no fireworks ..... Nicely done, pulled me in, and kept me reading. :)
02/03/07
A beautiful, but sad story of lost love; however, but if Mack continues to read and learn - he can tell Helen himself one day, and not have to send a message. Nice write, great read, and a beautiful message.
02/07/07
I like this man. You've done well to share him with us. Thanks.