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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Reading (01/25/07)

TITLE: Marion, the librarian
By dub W
01/25/07


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Marion, the librarian
Sat upon a stool
Her book was so aptly open
From her reading pool.

Marion, the librarian
Worked from dusk to dawn
Hushing little boys and girls, shhhh
Mary, Chris, and Sean.

Marion, the librarian
Picked out books for all
According to their special needs
At least, what she saw.

Marion, the librarian
Puffed the dust bunnies
Then she laughed at her dusty nose
Smiling so sunny.

Marion, the librarian
Closed up every night
No reading in the library
It was dark, no light.

Marion, the librarian
Got home half past eight
Ordered pizza for the night
Reading while she ate.

Marion, the librarian
Opened up the door
And put her books upon the desk
Her purse on the floor.

Marion, the librarian
Wiped a tear away
A pizza stain was all she saw
Fine without delay.

Marion, the librarian
A dollar and dime
She pulled from her purse down below
To pay for her dine.


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Jan Ackerson 02/02/07
I really liked this little character study...would also like to see Marion explored in prose. Could use some metrical edits to smooth it out a bit. I found her a very appealing and intriguing character.
Marilyn Schnepp 02/03/07
Creative, for sure - but lacked the metered rhyme and rhythmic beat. Keep at it until it flows like honey. Never give up - practice makes perfect.
Jen Davis02/05/07
Marion, the Librarian. A perfect name for a librarian, I think. A great title, too--I loved the rhyme. Although Iím not one to offer advice on poetry, I can tell you what I like. My favorite stanza:

Marion, the librarian
Got home half past eight
Ordered pizza for the night
Reading while she ate.
william price02/05/07
I get it, Marion's the Librarian...
Nice poem, Dub. I quit trying to write it myself, so i can't comment on the mechanics. But, I loved the character development and got a sense of her being. You created an honest picture. Would love to see Marion used in story form. God bless.
Allison Egley 02/05/07
I liked this, and thought the meter fit pretty well. I had to squeeze a few words in there, but it fit better than some poems. :)I'd also enjoy a further probe into her life.
Pat Guy 02/05/07
Dub, how could Marion the librarian eat and read before the pizza had arrived for her to pay for?

Am I missing something in this poem of no meaning? ;)

Great exercise.
Mariane Holbrook02/06/07
Nice job! Kudos! I like your work.
Timothy Oesch02/07/07
Hey, Sean's my name. What a coincidence. Anyways, good idea. Could be a bit more poemy, if ya know what I mean, but good free verse none the less.
Julie Arduini02/07/07
I think any librarians named Marion ought to be touched. I thought this was fun and I have always loved librarians and think any time they get some attention, good for them! Good job!
Dennis Fletcher02/07/07
Nice poem, wonderful storyline, but I have to agree with the idea of eating the pizza before she got it.
Sara Harricharan 02/07/07
This was pretty good. A little sad (from my POV) but interesting to read. I love the character of Marion, I wish there had been a litte more of her. Thanks for sharing!
Donna Emery02/07/07
A nice little poem and I'm glad you shared it. Very cute!
Myrna Noyes02/08/07
I'd really like to know where you can order pizza for "a dollar and a dime"? She must have had a great coupon! :D

Your poem made me smile, for which I thank you kindly! :)