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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Art (01/18/07)

TITLE: Ceil's Egg Money
By Laurie Glass
01/21/07


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A perty gal, jes’ like her ma,
Yep, that’s my daughter, Ceil.
So proud that I could a’most bust -
Well, that’s jes’ how I feel.

The missus died when Ceil was young,
I raised her on my own.
Not many girls around these parts,
Spent lots o’ time alone.

And yet that girl seemed not ta mind,
Drew pictures in the dirt,
Whatever scene that she could find
And yet kep’ up her work.

She asked for paper, pencil, too -
I pondered for a day.
Seemed silly, but she worked so hard,
So what else could I say?

Girl never griped, but aimed to please,
And always did her chores.
Made up my mind ta tell her that
Egg money would be hers.

Ceil smiled big and squeezed me tight,
Then ran right out the door,
Collected eggs and got ‘em washed
Ta take ‘em to the store.

She saved them pennies, all of ‘em
Until she had enough
Ta buy some paper, pencil, too -
Supplies for drawin’ stuff.

Decided, too, that she should paint,
An’ so she saved so’more.
She ordered all that she would need
At that there gen’ral store.

The first thing that she painted, my
She worked all day ‘til night.
First glance, and I could see it looked
Like that ol’ barn, a’right.

I saw how happy thet she was,
Good paintin’ she could do,
An’ always tol’ her she did good,
An’ raised more chickens, too.

Amazed at what thet girl could paint -
My perty daughter, Ceil.
It wasn’t jes’ what I could see -
Her pictures made me feel.

She saved egg money when she could,
A little at a time,
Ta get some learnin’ ‘bout this art -
It’s all that filled her mind.

I wanted her to stay, o’ course,
But knew it couldn’t be.
The day came she was all growed up,
An’ said good-by ta me.

She didn’t know I cried sometimes
On my ol’ lonely farm,
But smiled when I looked up et
Her paintin’ o’ the barn.

Ceil got her schoolin’ sure enough,
Egg money put her through.
I sent it to her all the time
Ta make her dreams come true.

She took ta sellin’ off her art -
The money she has made.
Stopped needin’ that egg money sent,
Her way was a’ways paid.

Egg money sat up in a jar
An’ things jes’ weren’t the same,
So took a mind ta visit her -
Used money for the train.

Got neighbor boy ta do the chores
An’ packed my Sunday clothes,
An’ took an extra bath an’ all
To see them city folks.

So here I am and I can see
My Ceil and all her art,
She’s happy an’ she’s done so good -
Lifts up this feller’s heart.

A perty gal, jes’ like her ma,
Yep, that’s my daughter, Ceil.
So proud that I could a’most bust -
Well, that’s jes’ how I feel.


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Tabiatha Tallent01/25/07
Oh my. I LOVED this! The meter is perfect, an easy read. The story is beautiful too. Great work.
Pat Guy 01/25/07
THIS is fantastic! It's just GOT place! I think you've discovered a gift here. ;) Absolutely LOVED it!
Betty Castleberry01/25/07
Wow, this is so much FUN! Very good rhyme and meter, and some humor thrown in for a bonus. YES!
Linda Watson Owen01/25/07
Call me a sentimental fool... I've got a tears in my eyes. This is absolutely wonderful! So skillfully written! You've aimed straight for the heart and hit dead center! Can you tell I love this precious poem?? I could read it again and again!
Verna Cole Mitchell 01/25/07
What a marvelous narrative poem! It flowed so naturally with dialog defining a wonderful character.
william price01/25/07
Oh for the heart of a poet.
This is far above natural praise. Besides a very, very inspiring, motivating and extremely well written poem, it is so anointed! I know we don't go by feelings, but I could feel the presence of God. Like His heart beat right along with the words in perfect time. This deserves a ribbon, but dear author, know this, your poem has to have put a smile on God's face. God bless.
Carla Feagans01/25/07
I so agree with all the previous comments.

Ya done good. 'Jes outstandin'!
Valora Otis01/26/07
This is beautiful! I could feel this fathers love, admiration, reverence and support throughout the entire piece. Bless his heart! He became a living, breathing child of our Father in heaven to me and I savored every stanza. You have such a good heart and it shines through each word you've written in this masterfully written poem.
Edy T Johnson 01/26/07
Dear Poet - If this is an indication of how well you write poetry, then I'm gonna have to put your name in nomination, too, to follow Kenn as Poet Laureate for the U.S. of A. :] I just love epic poetry, like you have written here. Even better than telling this story in prose, the extra work to turn it into poetry is well worth the effort.

Dittos to all the above commenters' words, too. Bravo! You are a rising star.
Edy T Johnson 01/26/07
p.s. forgot to tell you---this goes in my "favorites."
Joanney Uthe01/26/07
Great poem. I love the voice of the character. It brings the poem to life.
Sharlyn Guthrie01/28/07
What delightful fun! Thanks for the day-brightener. I can jest see that feller all spiffed up!
Marilyn Schnepp 01/28/07
Loved the story of Ceil; but leave it to the Simon Cowell of the Writing Set (ME)...I've got to tell you that Verse #4 didn't keep up the perfect rhythmic beat (smile); Otherwise, it was delightful, and I loved it from "beginnin ta end". Great Job!
Joanne Sher 01/28/07
Absolutely DELIGHTFUL in ever' way! I agree with ALL the positive comments above. Wonderful.
Beth Muehlhausen01/28/07
Lovely, lovely - a work of art!! Brilliant! Loved every bit. :-)
Sandra Petersen 01/29/07
Loved the rhyme, loved the ballad-like nature of the poem.

Ya done real good here, Laurie!
Jan Ackerson 01/29/07
How marvelous! I thoroughly enjoyed this.
Donna Emery01/30/07
This here poem is finer than a speckled hog.
In other words, I loved it!
Thanks for sharing it
Sara Harricharan 01/31/07
I echo the comments of wonderful, beautiful and fantastic! This was amazing to read. Great job here!
Ann FitzHenry01/31/07
I absolutely loved this! What a wonderful way to express the topic. I loved the narrator's voice. Great job!
darlene hight02/01/07
Laurie,
This is fantastic! It is definitely a winner in my book and I know a little ole magazine that it will fit right into. :)
Linda Watson Owen02/01/07
OH Yes!!! I knew this was a winner.. no doubt about it!! I'm so excited for you, Laurie! Woohoo!!!!
Edy T Johnson 02/01/07
Laurie! Laurie! Laurie! I'm so excited for you--Editor's Choice, and in the headliners for Advanced! You're going to be famous, and we can tell our friends we knew you back when you were moving up in the ranks :) Congratulations, Friend!
Jacqueline Zerres02/01/07
What a great job! You deserved it!