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01/18/07
This writing is high impact! Thanks for sharing your gift
This is beautiful. Nothing more needed to be said. Thank you.
01/18/07
I enjoyed reading this. A beautiful, moving character sketch--the old man comes alive in such a way that I can see, hear, and feel with him. Can also see and hear the caring nurse. Great descriptions and dialogue!

Concerning "wane smile" near the end: I think the word needed there is "wan."

The story's exotic title grabbed me right away. I also appreciate the English translation of the German statement at the story's end. Very powerful and moving. Great job!
Powerful! I was a little confused as to the setting, but I'm not sure it really mattered anyway. The important parts came through loud and clear.
01/20/07
Love your use of German - definitely had an impact on me. Very engaging and poignant.
01/21/07
An enlightening story with great depth. I wasn't sure where Werner was or is, but the rest of the story was powerfully explanatory. Nice job, well done.
01/21/07
A great story. The impression that it is important for Werner that someone "understands" is clearly evident. I agree "high impact."
I love stories about Jewish survivors. This one was well told and the main character so vividly real.
I really enjoyed it...made me go, "Awwww," at the end. Nicely done!