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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Cooking or Baking (01/04/07)

TITLE: The Snickerdoodle Adventure
By Donna Emery
01/06/07


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OK, team: is everybody here? Baron Von Butter here, calling us all to our duty.

Roll call! Sugar, vanilla, baking soda, salt, cinnamon, shortening, water, eggs? Good to see all of you. Be careful, eggs; you remember what happened to the others in your family when they got too close to that glass measuring cup. You don’t want to break before your time. Did I forget anyone? Oh, sorry cream of tartar. I always forget you. Come on and join us.

We make such wonderful cookies together, don’t we? And yet so few of us would taste good on our own. Even the sweetness of sugar is so much less tasty than our collaborative project. Some of us may even seem unnecessary. Take our forgotten friend, cream of tartar. Nobody’s really sure what he does. Yet he’s part of the result. Our consumers could take a lesson from us; the things in their lives that seem disagreeable are there for a reason. And the sweet parts of life aren’t meant to be the only thing they get to taste. They should evaluate their lives not as individual ingredients; but as the overall result of those ingredients.

OK… everybody… time to each take our turns with the measuring devices. Dry goods go first; that’s right. Don’t be impatient, water. If you get the cup wet, then the dry ingredients will stick to the sides. The right order is important. All the dry ones measured and in the bowl? Great! Let me get in here with shortening and join you all together. Now it’s your turn, water. Into the spoon, vanilla. Now you can get in there, eggs! Great job, everyone!

Almost time to get mixed together! We sure combine to make wonderful cookies. Our consumers could learn even more from the way we are formed. Each of us waited for the right time to be measured. Each of us had to be just the right amount. Just as our baker puts us together in the right order, in the right amount, each of their circumstances come to them in the correct order, and in the correct amount. Their Maker knows best, just as ours does.

Getting mixed together isn’t always comfortable. I know that someone as dry as flour must cringe at the consistency of eggs. And water must feel threatened by the dryness of the baking soda; what if she were consumed? And I know that I’m not the most popular member of this mélange. But we’re all necessary and each of us brings our own contribution to the cookies; each is vital to their flavor.

Foolish consumers! They get so upset when those of different consistencies come into their lives. They cringe or retreat; they avoid any semblance of discomfort in their relationships. Sometimes they even turn away from those who are different enough. If only they knew how wonderful it can be to mix with all of the ones sent into their lives by the Maker.

Mixing is soon over, and it’s time to be rolled into our shapes. That’s not so pleasant either, but we’re all together now and we can help each other through it. This step is hard, but the hardest of all is yet to come: the oven. There we lie in waiting and the heat can be unbearable. Often we’re tempted to leap off the cookie sheets because of the terrible heat! But we know that the heat is necessary if we are to be what we were meant to be. Some might point out that together we’re a tasty snack even without the ordeal of the oven. But when we submit to the heat, it makes us even more wonderful. If we wait until the appointed time, we will achieve our destiny.

Our consumers also endure a shaping, and then their own ordeal of heat. Their Maker must put them through many different trials in order to be what they are meant to be. Those circumstances will shape them into vessels that He can use, and then the fire will help them grow into His image. If they endure the fire that He sends, they will emerge as the ones they are meant to be.

Time’s up! We’re ready to cool, now. And here come our consumers. We’re ready for the end of our adventure. Let’s hope that they will be, when their own time comes.


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Marilyn Schnepp 01/11/07
Terrific start! So cool. I was impatient!...but then I got bogged down with the preaching. Sorry! The idea was, and is, super creative. But just too much of a good thing made me lose my appetite. Just wish it were shortened so that it could have held the interest you sparked in me from the get go. (my fault. short interest span)
Jan Ackerson 01/11/07
Clever object lesson--this would be cute in one of those church cookbooks, as an introduction to the "Cookies" section.
Sharlyn Guthrie01/11/07
This really is a cute story, and each section has a terrific point to it. Could be a little lighter, perhaps, but all in all very enjoyable!
Betty Castleberry01/15/07
Very unique. I, for one, like the little lessons sprinkled throughout. Nicely done.
Leigh MacKelvey01/16/07
I liked the little lessons also. I was thinking your main purpose was to give a lesson and how original it was for you to give it in the character of an ingrediant! A much more enjoyable and creative read then reading just the lesson! I congratulate you on a good teaching job!
Joanne Sher 01/17/07
I enjoyed the lesson AND the story - though I agree that I might have liked it a bit more if it were a little lighter. A very, very creative take!
Jen Davis01/17/07
Cute, clever and creative! Lots of great lines. Some of my favorites were: “And yet so few of us would taste good on our own.” “Getting mixed together isn’t always comfortable.” “I know that someone as dry as flour must cringe at the consistency of eggs.” “But we’re all necessary and each of us brings our own contribution...” “… it’s time to be rolled into our shapes. That’s not so pleasant either.” “…but the hardest of all is yet to come: the oven.”

This story has a lot of potential, and I hope that you will take the suggestions posted above and then submit it somewhere.
Sara Harricharan 01/17/07
ABSOLUTELY LOVED THIS! I can't help the captials, this was a charming and hilarious story, with a message woven into it so neatly and wonderfully you understood everything without even trying! I love the title and the 'characters' of the ingredients. What a creative take on topic!
Marilee Alvey01/22/07
I must admit that I read this because I LOVE snickerdoodle cookies! What an innovative piece! I'll never look at those cookies the same again...unless I'm really hungry! I liked how they had to put up with all kinds of things to reach their end goal: to be eaten, and adored by consumers. Ours is to be fashioned into an image of Christ. Now, that requires heat! Thanks for letting us have a peek at your imagination. It was great!