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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Pastor (11/30/06)

TITLE: The Little Hand You Can't See
By Trina Courtenay


The Little Hand You Couldn’t See

A botched back alley abortion left Pastor Gideon disfigured but didn’t kill him. It could have claimed his soul and it almost did. However, our God is an awesome God and He had other plans for this seemingly unwanted child.

Being named Gideon by the nurses at St. Joseph Hospital should have been the first clue but it would take twenty-two years for this child to begin to see the light. A caring, aging rancher and his wife, Gideon’s employers, found him passed out in his own vomit one morning. Instead of scolding him or worse dismissing him from his position at the ranch they helped wash him, and made him a healthy breakfast complete with a nice pot of hot coffee. While they were around the kitchen table they told Gideon that God loved him so much He sent His Son to earth to die on a cross for His sins.

Not easily persuaded by what he heard, Gideon only listened to what his boss was telling him so he wouldn’t lose his job. His ears didn’t perk up until he heard the words, ‘free education.’

He couldn’t believe Jim and Maggie wanted to pay for his education. He had always felt he was a burden on society and he was disfigured to boot. Nobody before had ever even looked at him twice unless it was to gawk and then make fun of him but here these two people sat at his table offering him a chance of a life time and so he snatched the opportunity up as quickly as it was offered. What Gideon hadn’t heard was the college they were sending him to was a Christian college.

The first day of class started off with an hour of worship and prayer in the main hall and ended with Gideon downing a forty of whiskey in his dorm room. He was mad at his former employer and felt deceived and tricked causing him to turn once again to the one thing that never seemed to fail him.

Day two started off in the dean’s office but instead of being reprimanded he again was given a second chance. This made Gideon pause. He’d been forgiven twice in the last couple of months by people who hardly knew him. Maybe he’d give this Christian college thing half a chance after all strangers were giving him one.

By the end of week three Gideon had asked the Lord Jesus into his life and by the end of the first semester he decided he’d become a pastor. Day and night he lived for the one who died for him. His heart that was once full of hatred for the world became full of love and compassion. People no longer saw his disfigurement; they saw a man in love with his lord.

In fact when I first met Pastor Gideon I never even noticed his little hand until he flicked me in my shoulder for telling a gut busting joke. I tell you, his little hand sure has a lot of power behind it. It must be the power of the Lord.

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Peggy Bennitt12/08/06
This is a wonderful story that could be awesome with some dialogue from the characters. I could visualize this as a part of a larger story. Nice!
Marilyn Schnepp 12/09/06
A sad story with a happy ending. I didn't understand the "forty" whiskey...but I enjoyed the read. Nice job.
Amy Michelle Wiley 12/10/06
I would love to see this made into a novel. Good story.
Catrina Bradley 12/12/06
Powerful opening - and great story with good ending. At first, I was picturing his "disfigurement" as something horrifying, as I'm sure Gideon did. Then in this sentence: "People no longer saw his disfigurement; they saw a man in love with his lord." I got the feeling he didn't see it anymore, either. I stumbled a few places, but it didn't distract from your wonderful story.
Virginia Gorg12/13/06
Attention holding, but I also would have enjoyed some dialogue. Nicely written with a good forgiveness message. :)
Ann FitzHenry12/14/06
Wow! What a story! The opening sentence was fabulous. I didn't understand the title until the very end.--I loved how you tied it all together. Congratulations! Welcome to advanced! :-)
Linda Watson Owen01/13/07
Congratulations on your highly commended entry! I'm a week late, but the sentiment is just as sincere. No wonder you were awarded it. This is a delightful entry, full of hope, real challenges, and even good humor! A treat to read!
Linda Watson Owen01/13/07
Oops...more than a WEEK late! I need to clean my glasses! LOL!
Bonnie Derksen01/15/07
What a hope-filling story about the reality of God searching and bringing home His lost ones.
I loved the way you wrote this. Second chances and unconditional love are the tools of battle to dismantle the enemy's hold.
Oh, that we would all have our eyes open to be ready to offer them to those in our world.
Thanks for the great challenge.
Blessings on your writing, Trina!