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Great job! It is because of this that many pastors will not meet alone with a woman. Wise decision of the pastor to leave the house right away.
12/08/06
Excellent and vivid retelling of the temptations that confront every pastor. The narrative held me to the end, desperate to know the outcome. My only confusion is that on second reading I’m not sure what the outcome actually was. The first time I read it, I assumed that the pastor closed the door on his way out, resisting the seductress, and this is probably the right take. But the second time, I read it that he closed the door, locking himself in the room with the Sheila, such that his ‘indiscretion’ was therefore much more serious. Either way an engaging tale.
12/08/06
Excellent and vivid retelling of the temptations that confront every pastor. The narrative held me to the end, desperate to know the outcome. My only confusion is that on second reading I’m not sure what the outcome actually was. The first time I read it, I assumed that the pastor closed the door on his way out, resisting the seductress, and this is probably the right take. But the second time, I read it that he closed the door, locking himself in the room with the Sheila, such that his ‘indiscretion’ was therefore much more serious. Either way an engaging tale.
12/08/06
Well-written!

I'm a bit confused, too...you have the pastor confess his indiscretion, but it appears that he didn't give in. Perhaps he should have confessed his temptation, instead? Unless by "indiscretion" you meant just going to Sheila's house alone.

A small matter to clear up...unless you left it intentionally vague, perhaps? Well, no matter, because this is compelling reading, and should be read by all pastors as a cautionary tale.
12/08/06
So VERY compelling and engaging. You had me on the edge of my seat from beginning to end. You did an awesome job of characterization and setting. You definitely deserve to be where you are, dear friend. :)
12/10/06
You had me from start to finish. I too am a bit confused as to the pastor's indescretion. I too thought it was he shouldn't have went there to start with, and maybe his indescretion was the motives for doing so. I actually thought for a minute the lady did kill herself after he left. Or, maybe he stayed? Yet, with all that said, the story was engrossing and very well written. God bless.
12/10/06
A well done story. Sadly gripping portail of a man in grief for those in his care, knowing the the only thing he could do to remove temptation, was to step away. Even when it meant leaving the others of his flock behind.

Quite the Godly strength on your pastor's part, to leave the 99 so the one would not fall further. Well done..
12/10/06
Upon reading the comments of his Idriscretion i read again the story, and could see it clear. It seems he was stricken by the fact that if he had seen it before hand, perhaps he would have, or should have, take his wife along. He had been worned of such but though nothing of it, as she was not a tempation to him. he did not see it as him being one to her.
12/10/06
ummm... indescretion
12/10/06
This is quite a gripping story that keeps a reader to the end, for sure. I think the pastor's heightened sense of remorse might lead readers into suspecting "more happened" than actually did (perhaps if he had just mentioned to his wife "Pray! This is a suicide call," as he left the table). But,it seems clear to me his grief only shows what a conscientious pastor he is, and he takes Sheila's situation and deception so seriously. The fact that he reacted with horror, prayed for direction, and said what he did shows me without a doubt that he closed the door "behind him" as he fled the house. I didn't sense that he was tempted, but rather revolted by this woman's scheming behavior. The "attraction" was all in Sheila's mind.
12/10/06
On second read, I noticed something I missed first time around. The timing of the opening paragraph: he isn't walking away from his own, but Sheila's house just after he closed her door behind him (scroll down to the episode and read it in that order). That gives me a better understanding at the level of his grief and dispair. The difficult decision to which he refers is turning his back to this suicide-threatening church member because he cannot help her, given her twisted intentions. It wasn't at all difficult, as I read it, for him to reject her advances (which might be where some readers were confused).
12/12/06
I wasn't confused until I read the other comments. :)
The decision he had to make in the opening was clearly the decision to time of great need. I thought his indescretion was to the Lord, not to his wife. Anyway, I enjoyed the story - good job!
12/12/06
Oops, just read my own comment and saw where I left out some words. Should say: The decision he had to make in the opening was clearly the decision to abandon this one sheep in her time of great need.
Excellant idea for "pastor" and well written. I have to add too, I was wondering about the indescetion. I understood he was walking away from the woman's house in the first paragraph, but I thought he resisted her advances. I wondered why he was asking his wife's forgivness. The little bit of confusion didn't keep me from the great enjoyment of reading it!
This story rings true. It certainly could have, and no doubt has, happened to a pastor. You did a good job of desribing what the pastor was dealing with. Nicely done.
12/12/06
I love the reminder of how Pastor's are humans too. Nice job with the transions back and forth. Thank you for sharing.
12/12/06
Your opening paragraph drew me in immediately. The story kept my interest throughout. It would have been clearer to me had you used the word temptation rather than indiscretion, but that didn't detract from the story for me. Good work. Blessings, Cheri
12/13/06
Whoa! Some heavy stuff in here, but sadly a realistic situation that some pastors do deal with. Good job with writing this, it was pretty clear and I loved the character of the pastor's wife.
12/14/06
Hi. I felt disappointed at first because your meaning seemed so unclear, then I realized that the ambiguity is what makes it compelling. His indiscretion could arguably be any number of things; it is left to the reader to decide what he or she thinks it is. This is thought provoking, which makes it a pleasure to read. Thanks.
12/15/06
I'm glad I read this after the fact. I understood your article very clearly. I saw it as Edy did in her second comment. To leave her alone after such a desparate attempt for attention, although innapropriate––was a cry for help. This is truly a cautionary tale. Well done, Chrissy! Welcome to Advanced!