The Official Writing Challenge
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12/08/06
Wow--you've certainly given a lot of thought to the quelities of a good pastor! This is awesome!

A very long poem in rhymed couplets starts to feel almost tiring after a bit--I encourage you to experiment with different rhyming schemes in future poetry. And feel free to PM me if you'd like additional thoughts on making your meter more consistent.

I so much appreciate the hours of thought and hard work that must have gone into this!
12/09/06
Alot of effort went into this poetic essay on Pastor; however, as a reader, it would be less monotonous if it were broken down into verses perhaps. As a poet, I'd suggest a different type of meter and rhyme as Jan suggested...to make it more palatable. Nice going though, and has many great thoughts.
12/10/06
I too can appreciate all the work that went into this poem. I can tell you wrote it straight from your heart. It was expressed very honestly. A true gift. God bless.