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12/08/06
This is gorgeous! It really evokes another time and antoher place, with a masterful touch with dialog and description. I did NOT want this one to end. And the translation of the 23rd Psalm in an unfamiliar version was so refreshing--like hearing it for the first time.
12/08/06
I really enjoyed this. You did an excellent job with characterization. Beautiful!
12/08/06
This is very impressive. Excellent descriptions and story line. And the characters, well, don't we just love them already! Would you consider expanding this into a book? I'm sure everyone who reads this will be shouting, "More!"
12/09/06
Excellent story, well crafted,written and minstered. I love stories by the sea or in snow. Whatever, I know. Anyway, if I had to leave one comment though, I am not a big fan of the word smell. Its one of those multi edged words, and even though I knew you used to discribe the contrasts of scents and odors of the summer,I think it is the weakest of the choices you had to use here, especially by itself. That being said (which is just a personal thing with me)this is masterful writing and story telling. God bless.
12/11/06
You painted a portrait - nay, a masterpiece - with your words. Your dialogue was also fabulous - it felt so very authentic and was delightful to read. Wonderful.
12/11/06
Pulled me right into another place and another time. A beautiful read. Very skillful writing. And I also loved the unfamiliar version of Psalm 23. Blessings, Cheri
12/11/06
I especially liked the opening paragraph. You are a master at describing the environs of Hannah's life. I could almost smell the fishing nets. I, too, liked the authenticity the translation of the 23rd Psalm lent the entire story.

Great job, as usual, Dub.
12/11/06
Peaceful, calm and evocative. I felt swept back to the time of the article. I loved this. Thanks for sharing it.
12/11/06
Fascinating. I would have loved to have understood more of the history of this time. What a different world so wonderfully described.
12/13/06
Beautifully painted landscape of a time and place so different from our own. I loved every word of it (except, like William, maybe "smell") (he he). Thanks for taking us on a lovely journey to the sea.
This was a good read, with easy flow and believable dialogue. I like Hannah's excitement when she learns she will be baptized. Well done.
12/13/06
Please write more of this story - like maybe an entire book!!
12/14/06
This was wonderfully written. I enjoyed reading it, and the character of Hannah. It seemed a little confusing in the beginning, Not sure if that's just me-but I had to read it back a few times. Otherwise, I liked the story overall, especially the end.
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