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11/30/06
Love your title, love that teacher. Really good story.
12/01/06
I really love slice-of-life stories. This one is exceptional. It took me back to my school days. I could picture the lockers standing at attention. Great imagery! My favorite line: God have you ever been twelve years old? Priceless!
Great story! God has a way of getting us through tough things, doesn't He.
12/04/06
You did an astounding job of setting this, and developing your characters. This SO reminded me of being in sixth grade! What a wonderful teacher - and a wonderful story.
12/04/06
I love the incongruity of this tough teacher with a Mickey Mouse hat. I can easily understand how poor Valerie felt. A unique perspective on the topic. Thanks for sharing this
12/05/06
Unique take on the topic. Great imagery. Very nice all the way around.
12/06/06
I love this story - really put me there. Favorite line: "The blush of my face would soon match my hair color to perfection." And I could picture her rubbing that spot with her toe. Great job!!
12/06/06
My absolutely favorite paragraph (how do you manage to paint such visible characters in so few words!):
"My sixth grade teacher stood at the door with his muscular arms folded. A whistle hung from his neck. His chiseled jaw chomped gum while his sharp eyes sized up each kid that walked by. I tugged at my dress, smoothing the wrinkles. My appearance had changed over the summer. Mom said that I’d “blossomed” whatever that meant. I wilted away from my teacher, smiling shyly. It was going to be a long year."

In fact, I liked this so much (it's a reader-grabber for sure)I would have started the story, here, even though I also liked the images in your first paragraph. Cute, funny, realistic, and just great storytelling. I want more. A "favorite" for sure.
12/06/06
This is such a sweet story that I think a lot of us can relate to. Thanks so much for sharing!