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11/30/06
Very touching. I think I'd rework the end a little or stop at where she says, "She needs you."
12/01/06
Awwww! If anything makes me "lump up," it's stories of reconciliation. Thanks for writing this.
12/02/06
So sweet and touching. Your description is so wonderful and vivid, and the dialogue is great. I also found the very end to be the weakest part, but I enjoyed this very much overall!
12/04/06
Made me want to read on and see the reunion! Great job.
Blessings, Cheri