The Official Writing Challenge
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11/30/06
Aww, what a sweet story. The reaction of the younger girl to the older one was quite believable, as was the dialogue. Well done.
12/01/06
Wonderful - great dialogue. This gets my vote.
12/01/06
The dialogue sounded so authentic. Very nice!
12/02/06
You almost made me cry at work. Great story, wonderful lesson about God using us when we're obedient, even if we don't want to be there.
12/04/06
This was great! I hope it's on the list (next to mine :-) ). The dialogue is very believable and is what makes this story work.
Obligatory suggestion: additional description would help paint the scene. Not sure how old Lila is... 16? 12? This type of detail might add and might not--just a point to consider.
Excellent entry!
12/06/06
I was attracted to read this by the title ... and I'm glad I did!! It was a very convincing, realistic, and sweet story. If it was the start to a longer story, I would know that it was a novel I would enjoy sitting down and reading. Good writing.