The Official Writing Challenge
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11/25/06
A very sad story; the only problem was the father and son's names got me confused at first and I had to go back and re-read to find out the difference, and who was whom. Well written...as expected in Masters.
11/27/06
Your first paragraph was absolutely AMAZING - that image stuck in my head throughout the reading of the story. Masterful description and storytelling. What an amazing tribute.
11/29/06
What a compelling story about the sacrificial love of parents. The last paragraph was a bit abrupt, and I would have liked to have seen it a bit more "filled out," if that makes sense. And yet, the abruptness fits with the story; though Braulito's death was a lingering process, his life was abruptly cut short, making us face the reality that none are guaranteed tomorrow. Blessings, Cheri