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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Parent (11/16/06)

TITLE: Who's Your Daddy?
By Lynda Lee Schab
11/21/06


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With a loud cry,
Sadie Jean entered the world.
She looked around the room
At all of the strange faces
One by one...

Are you my daddy?

Sadie Jean turned four today.
Her mother took her to a local pizza place
To celebrate.
It was very crowded
Too many people to count…

Could one of them be my daddy?


A stranger came over tonight.
He slept in her mother’s bed
And made Sadie Jean pancakes for breakfast.
He seemed nice,
Nicer than the others.

Maybe he can be my daddy.


On the day she turned ten
Sadie Jean had a beautiful cake
With pink frosting and ten candles.
“Make a wish, Sadie Jean!”
She blew with all her might.

I wish I had a daddy…


The invitation was in her hand.
“Come to a father/daughter banquet.”
Sadie Jean let go of the paper
And it fell to the ground
She burst into tears.

I have no daddy!


A boy kissed her
Sadie Jean was seduced by his affection.
Maybe if she gave him what he wanted
He would stick around -
At least for a while.

Unlike my daddy…


Sadie Jean woke up this morning
in another man’s bed.
He lay sleeping
right beside her
But she had never felt more alone.

Would I be here if I had a daddy?


Walking down the street
On a rainy afternoon.
A church choir was singing
Sadie Jean was drawn in
She swayed to the music.

Did they say something about daddy?


“He loves you, Sadie Jean…
He’ll never leave you…
If you let Him into your heart
He will be your daddy.
He longs to be your daddy.”

I’ve never had a daddy…


Cheeks wet with tears.
Heart filled with peace,
Sadie Jean looked up
And offered her heart.
He took it. Held it. Healed it.

I love you, daddy…


"For my father and my mother have forsaken me, but the Lord will take me up." Psalm 27:10 (New American Standard)


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Lynda Schultz 11/23/06
Beautiful! What a wonderful way to express that passage of scripture. Good job.
Steve Uppendahl11/25/06
Great, great job.

As a teacher I've seen too many girls like Sadie Jean. As a father of two daughters, they are the reasons that I do everything I can so they don't end up like Sadie Jean.

Powerful writing.
Janell Price11/26/06
Your excellent phrasing showcases your godly perception. My favorite!
Donna Emery11/26/06
Very, very good. I loved her thoughts intersecting with the rest of the story. Excellent!
dub W11/27/06
Very creative approach - loved the progession of the poem.
william price11/27/06
written and crafted beautifully. I enjoy the many levels of your work. This is even better when read out loud. I loved it. Excellent job. God bless.
Jan Ross11/27/06
Ahhh ... wonderfully crafted! Unfortunately more real than we'd like to think. I love the way you put this together. It's powerful! Great work! :)
Genstacia Bull11/28/06
Wow! Real everyday stuff. Well done
Jan Ackerson 11/28/06
Oh, wow, this is great! I know so many "Sadie Jeans." Gorgeous writing, perfectly constructed.
Todd Tribble11/28/06
That was unbelievable....it was put together like a puzzle that only reveals its picture when the last piece is placed into position...a great piece of writing!!
Donna Haug11/29/06
Ah! The importance of a father. Excellent!
Sara Harricharan 11/29/06
Beautiful. Heartfelt. Good job!
Cheri Hardaway 11/29/06
A beautiful job of sharing a sad story that is too familiar to too many... Blessings, Cheri
Joanne Sher 11/29/06
Expertly written - wonderful message expressed so poignantly.
Birdie Courtright11/30/06
Blinking back tears--hauntingly beautiful!
Suzanne R11/30/06
The way you interspersed the questions throughout worked really well. This was very touching. Great writing!