The Official Writing Challenge
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11/23/06
Nicely done - flows well, is easy to read, and has good, solid writing. Good story of true family love. Thanks.
11/24/06
I liked the characters - good boo hoo at the end. Good dialogue:) I wouldn't change a thing except there was one place when she was talking about Simon and it sounded like he was working...I may have read it wrong though. Good writing!
11/27/06
I have neices (on in-law side) in the same boat. Its a sad situation. You told the story very well. I was nodding my head in recognition the entire way. Nice take on the topic. Excellent job as always. God bless.
11/27/06
I love this, especially the way it ended. Very touching. Thanks for writing it!
11/28/06
Sounds like the sort of family that "Extreme Makeover" features. Even though Simon is not actually a character in the story, I feel as if I know him--serious little boy just "doing his job." What a sweetie!
Well, one doesn't have to be a parent to do what parents ought to do. This is a picture of true brotherhood. It reminds me of, "He ain't heavy, coz he's my brother". This was excellent show of responsibity for one another. Thanks for sharing it!
11/29/06
This is so compelling - and you have created some amazing charcters that I so want to know more about! Great writing.
11/29/06
Dub, I really enjoyed reading this story. I felt proud of little Simon and his family. Life's not easy for a lot of people, and you showed us a slice of that.
I like the twist on what makes a parent. You told your story well. Thumbs up.
I really enjoyed this story Dub. You made the sister/stand in mom very real and created a picture of their life well.

11/29/06
When I got to the end of this I said "amen!". You are right about her being a parent. I also wanted to know more about Simon and his amazing family. Well done! I enjoyed reading this very much. Thanks for sharing this.
11/29/06
Very nice, Dub. Thanks.
11/29/06
Dub,

Unique take on parenting! Very creative, and sends a very encouraging message about what love can do in a family. Excellent. Blessings, Cheri
I loved the cohesiveness of the children all working together. It made me wonder though, how a woman who skipped out on her family managed to produce such responsible and level headed young people. Great story, very uplifting.