The Official Writing Challenge
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I can relate, as I lost my first child, too. My then-husband wasn't very helpful, though. This is well written, but the change in POV from the husband to the nurses was a bit confusing. Perhaps he could have overhead them? You covered a delicate subject with compassion.
I liked the showing part of the emotion - when he moved a strand of her hair. I like the gentle way you showed her emotions and his attempt to console. The ending was a little weak I think but overall your writing is strong and draws the reader in:) tough subject to write on - but you did great!
Sad. Sometimes it doesn't seem fair. I could see the pain of the woman. Maybe a bit more of the pain of the man? I think this was a good read.
Very well written and it portrays a reality that many try to hide. Read "In the Palm of My Hand" in this with the same issue....sounds like the two of you may have similar circumstances.
It was so touching to see the husband reach out to the wife in their grief - sometimes people turn away to grieve alone. Very moving story.