The Official Writing Challenge
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11/16/06
This was so well written. I was there on the beach watching as it all played out. This one's definitely at the top of my list, great job.

It's such a heartfelt reminder of how cold and callous our thoughts of others can be, especially when we were teenagers. We never really know the whole story, and we can never judge accurately based on surface observation.
11/16/06
Good story. I saw the twist coming - then it twisted again! One line had me puzzling: I reflected on my words and thoughts. I’d been wrong, and now I’d feel like a dolt all afternoon. Some great turns of phrase, too. I loved your descriptions of the sea.
11/20/06
Love the last sentence--perfection.
11/21/06
I too saw the 1st twist, but not the 2nd. Great job keeping the interest level up and keeping your readers guessing!
11/21/06
Wonderful description and detail. So very engaging!
11/22/06
Whoa! Don't do that to me again! ;) I loved the flow of this whole piece. Like the waves of the sea you wrote about!

Great stuff Ann! (once again)
11/22/06
Such a tragic story, gripping and nicely written. I enjoyed the evidence of Tom’s humble spirit at the end of your story.
11/22/06
Pretty good stuff; study point of view to make this stronger.
11/22/06
Always well written ... every entry another winner. This is no exception. From characters to descriptions to sceens you've done a very strong job. Congrats!