The Official Writing Challenge
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11/16/06
Please post more of your poems at Poetry and Poets of God: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/poetryandpoetsofgod/
11/18/06
I loved the way you used the story of the prostitute's life as an allegory to drowning. While you spent a lot of time describing her shame, there only seem to be two verses on how different life is for her afterwards, and because of this, it felt a little rushed/unfinished.
Nice flow of events.
11/20/06
Masterfully written. I loved it! In Christ's Love,

Julia
11/21/06
Oh, how lovely! I'm glad you didn't go on any more verses--I think it's perfect as is.
11/21/06
I liked this. The flow, meter and rhyme scheme were all nearly flawless. Great job.
11/21/06
A beautiful, well constructed poem with only one period throughout the entire story. Amazing!
11/22/06
This is absolutely lovely - the rhyme and meter are wonderful, as is the message. Great images as well.
11/22/06
This was well put together. Loved the flow and pace. Nice job!
11/23/06
I envy people who can capture a message and deliver it so well in perfect meter and rhyme. Beautiful!