The Official Writing Challenge
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11/16/06
Highly readable and entertaining. If I were to be hyper-critical, I was a bit disappointed the end didn't have a punch - you had so may good lines and laughs along the way, I hoped for a tour de force at the end! But this is definitely one I'll remember - those spaghetti legs...
11/17/06
If I had had a swimming instructor like Sven, I might have actually learned how to swim! Loved your descriptions of the "girlish" feelings.
11/18/06
This was a lot of fun. You had some great descriptions interwoven throughout, and got in touch with all of the right emotions.
11/19/06
lol - you have some great lines here. This was a joy to read.
11/19/06
I loved the footnote! I think mre decription of Sven would not have gone amiss! Liked his accent!
11/20/06
Marvelous!!!
11/21/06
Thanks for this very entertaining read. This is my favorite line: Part of me wanted to shout, “wheeee----“
Well done.
11/21/06
Great job. I kept picturing Arnold Schwarzenegger as the swim instructor/lifeguard. This was a great read.
11/21/06
Loved Sven's accent, and all the wonderful description. This was very vivid and a great story! Also loved the footnote. Great writing, Lynda!
11/21/06
An intriguing and interesting romance; kept me glued to the story; plus, nicely written with wit and easy flow. Well done.
11/22/06
Thanks for the great read. Very well written, filled with fun quips, descriptions and accents. Yeh! The MC wins the guy! So sorry, Carmen. I really enjoyed this, Lynda. Thanks for pointing my way here.
11/22/06
Oh yah, what a fun read! Many good lines, but my fave, too, was "Part of me wanted to shout, “wheeee----“ but the other desperately longed to wrap my arms around Sven" I could so see myself there!
11/22/06
Oooh... I don't know if I would have wanted to hang off of Sven.
11/22/06
lol ... liked this one. Nice and light compared to some others. Enjoyed this!
11/23/06
A fun read. Well done.