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11/16/06
Really lovely, really evocative. I love the way you've spun this. My favourtie line: battered seacastles, battered folly One of my favourites of yours.
11/16/06
Please post more of your poems at Poetry and Poets of God: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/poetryandpoetsofgod/
Oh Sue ... this is FANTASTIC! I absolutely loved this ... In my opinion this is some of your very best writing. I found it so poignant (sp?), so very haunting. Fabulous. Fabulous. Fabulous. I loved the non-happy-ending/happy-ending. That alone lifts this entry above so many others. The other images and word choices do so too, of course! I hope this places for you ... it deserves too.
11/21/06
Hmmmm . . . guess Sue won't need to throw a brick this week. My goodness! Stephen certainly was excited about this one. He forgot we're not supposed to put names before the all clear. But I for one forgive him. LOL

Oh to affect someone so much that they forget the rules!!

God is good.
11/21/06
Oh, I loved this. I especially loved the reference to the "footprints" poem in the one stanza. Great job. And don't worry, Sue. You didn't "make" anyone break the rules. He did it on his own. ;)
11/22/06
Extraordinary poem. Like Stephen, I loved, loved, loved it. The movement of the water you truly captured in the lyrical voice of your words. Very visual and evocative. Congratulations on a wonderful piece.
11/22/06
Such WONDERFUL imagery, Sue! You paint a wonderful picture here, my dear!
11/22/06
I wait to fall but you are there... Gorgeous line. I agree with all previous commenters--this is simply outstanding.

I'll add that I enjoyed your use of alliteration--it added to the ocean-like atmosphere of this wonderful poem.
11/22/06
Quill's off to you, Sue! (Rhyming not intentional-lol)I absolutely loved this! So beautiful to read, very vivid, like I was right there. Awesome job! :)
11/22/06
Very, very nicely done. A favorite line of mine: “Sandpipers step lightly around battered sandcastles…” Congratulations on this beautifully written piece.
11/22/06
Excellent poem. Your description brought me right inside the ocean with you. Very moving. Thanks for sharing it.
11/22/06
Good poetic form, nice poetic descriptions. A good job throughout. Thanks for sharing.
11/23/06
Beautiful, Sue! I normally don't write or read much poetry, but this took my breath away. Your descriptive language carried me through your poem and left me awestruck at the other side. Excellent!
11/23/06
Whew!!! *wiping sweat from forehead* for a minute there I thought this might place. Good Grief!
11/23/06
And for the record, I'm not asking for critiques. I do thank all for the wonderful comments though!
11/23/06
Can't believe this didn't place, Sue. I reckon it deserved a place in EC. I wasn't judging, but you win in my book.
11/23/06
Thank you Helen. If you only knew how much that means to me right now! I really thought this entry MIGHT be in the top 15 or at least the 40! I just don't get it sometimes. But hey, if it blessed someone then it was worth it, right?