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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Lifeguard (11/09/06)

TITLE: Compassionate Eyes
By Laurie Glass
11/11/06


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Swirling in sadness,
Dizzy with doubt,
Too downhearted to hang on.

Shriveled shell floating,
no struggle,
current increases,
water washes over my hollow soul.

Lids closed,
light eludes blackened heart,
give in to darkness.

Bitter desperation
brings despondency.
Suffocating sorrow
breeds hopelessness.

Heart devoid of feeling,
body overcome by numbness,
empty and alone.
No one to rescue me,
no sign of relief.

Inhale death’s vapors…
drowning in deluge of despair,
sinking,
separating from my soul.

Silence surrounds my demise…
slowly drifting,
almost sleeping.

Touch pierces isolation…
hand tugging, pulling,
beckoning, begging.

Shocked, yet limp, nearly lifeless…
dragged to shore.
Suddenly choking, gasping
for the breath I freely gave up.

Dazed,
scarcely able to open my eyes,
light appears.
Strain to see through the blur,
stare into compassionate eyes
consumed with concern,
overwhelmed with love and devotion.

Look conveys every unspoken word,
no questions, no condemnation,
but care and comfort
confirmed by a single tear.

Mesmerized, gaze fixed upon my rescuer…
speechless,
reach for the healing hand
of the sympathetic One who saved me.


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Monique Fox11/16/06
Please post more of your poems at Poetry and Poets of God: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/poetryandpoetsofgod/
Linda Watson Owen11/19/06
Wow, dear writer, you've taken your reader to the depths and back again. I really feel like I'm gasping for air as I've come through your poem. Very effective images and I like the sound of the alliteration you've used too. Well done!
Ann FitzHenry11/20/06
Lovely! Wonderful images and emotions. I enjoyed this very much. Thanks!
Edy T Johnson 11/21/06
This reminds me of Haiku. Your beautiful word choices capture the essence of a moment in which the narrator gives in to the temptation to sink into the oblivion of the swirling water. Then come those eyes, that hand, the Lifeguard! I'll have to read this one over and over again.
Beth Muehlhausen11/21/06
This says it like it is.....and describes ministry to a "T." Very Real. Thanks for this trip into the heart of every human being on earth and the corresponding inspiration to be used by God to minister.
Sandra Petersen 11/22/06
Laurie, what a wonderful complete description of the lost soul that is rescued by Jesus Christ. I'm not a good judge of poetry so I can't comment on style, but your carefully chosen words fit the death-then-life message you were conveying. Well done!
Pat Guy 11/26/06
Wow! This is awesome Laurie! You nailed it all. Wow.