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11/16/06
Wow, what a tragic turn of events, and then yet another. You had me captivated in both the action packed sequence and the more quiet opening paragraphs. Nice job.
11/17/06
Great ending, but sadder than I like. It reminded me of the ending in "My Sister's Keeper," by Jodi Picoult. So how will this affect Danny? I think there needs to be more to this story! Good job!
11/20/06
This story haunted me. I loved the unexpected ironic twist of the suicidal potential victim becoming the rescuer of the lifeguard--even at cost of her own life! Sad yet very beautiful and wonderfully creative.

I also enjoyed the portrayal of the lifeguard himself, how he used conversation creatively to take the woman's attention off herself and onto others. Great job!