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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Lifeguard (11/09/06)

TITLE: A Rescue Just in Time
By Venice Kichura


Luke stood upon a squally beach,
Gazed at the ocean blue,
Watched seagulls spread their graceful wings--
As to the sky they flew.

A yellow flag flapped on the pier,
It whipped against the wind.
It cautioned, Heed the dangers here---
This warning, please attend.

He heard a tender inner voice,
Be wary of the tide;
Be sure that you can swim to shore---
The waves are deep and wide.

Another voice chimed, What’s to fear?
The waves are safe and sound--
You’ve earned your Boy Scout swimming badge,
You surely will not drown.

No sweat, Luke mused, Why should I fear?
Through yellow lights I drive
And sometimes they are shades of orange
Yet I arrive alive.

He waxed his surfboard for the ride
But thought, Perhaps I’ll wade---
At first I’ll test the waters out
And then won’t be afraid.

No thrill in wading, let me surf.
He scanned a distant wave.
Then on his shiny board he leapt--
Adventure he did crave.

Then as he ventured further out
In waters o’er his head
He felt a buzz and sudden rush
That shoved him straight ahead.


It started with some little sips
Of beer and stolen wine.
But then it wasn’t long before
He couldn’t walk a line.

A cop stopped him one stormy night
And drove him off to jail.
He’d run his car into a ditch;
A breath test he did fail.

When he got out he vowed he’d stop
And not go o’er his head.
But soon he dove in higher waves--
Sunk deeper down instead.

The ecstasy of sex and drugs
Lured Luke still further out
Into the depths of greater wiles;
He felt alone, without.

Soon scores of deeds unspeakable
Allured him further down.
Before he knew it he had sunk.
He thought, I’ll surely drown.

The waves of pleasure and delight
Had called, Just jump right in.
He had not known what looked so good
Could drown his soul in sin.

He shouted, “Someone rescue me,
A life preserver throw.”
But not one lifeguard could be found--
Strong winds began to blow.

Then from above He heard a voice
Call, “Son, just take my hand.
I’m here to save and rescue you
And lead you to dry land.”

Unto the Savior’s hand he clung
And safely swam ashore.
A lifeguard who came just in time,
Christ did his life restore.

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Monique Fox11/16/06
Please post more of your poems at Poetry and Poets of God: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/poetryandpoetsofgod/
Angela Logsdon11/17/06
Love it, Beautifully done.
Joanne Sher 11/17/06
Masterfully done - I was captivated from beginning to end. I loved both parts of this poem, and especially the end of the second part.
Jan Ackerson 11/20/06
Excellent--the two halves perfectly compliment each other, and the rhyme and meter are spot on.

If I were to nitpick at all, it would be to get rid of the long row of asterisks in favor of only three, and no extra space between the halves. Will make it seem more like one unified poem.

I like this poem (have known people like Luke.)
Amy Michelle Wiley 11/20/06
Well done. I love the comparison of both halves.
Donna Haug11/20/06
Very interesting poem. At first my mind jumped to Luke, the disciple - I have no idea why. Was a sharp jolt back when I realize how far off I was! But I liked the two parts of this poem and his ultimate rescue. Good work.
Allison Egley 11/21/06
Great poem. Everything flowed to make a very cohesive poem. I especially liked the last few stanzas.
Maxx .11/22/06
Very strong piece. Really kept my attention. Love the word use!
Suzanne R11/23/06
Excellent writing - well done!
cindy yarger12/21/06
Good verse, very well done.