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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Doctor/Nurse (11/02/06)

TITLE: I Thought I Was a Doctor
By Stephanie Bullard
11/08/06


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I thought I was a doctor…
For when I was just a boy,
A doctor’s what I always hoped to be.
I’d always find sick creatures,
Nurse them back to health and joy,
And proudly pat the back of “Dr. Me.”

I thought I was a doctor…
For when I was still a teen,
I studied hard beneath a healing man,
I learned of all the medicines,
Of proper ways to clean
And bandage wounds with deft and rapid hands.

I thought I was a doctor…
For when I became a man,
“Doctor” was the title that I claimed.
I dedicated every day
To warding off death’s plan,
My name and my success were well proclaimed.

I thought I was a doctor…
‘Til the day that I met Him,
And my take on help and healing took a turn,
He could heal with but a touch;
His words sent death back to Hell’s brim.
I knew that I had so much more to learn.

I thought I was a doctor…
But I stayed there by His side,
To watch his every move and knowledge gain,
And found that He was more concerned
With fixing what’s inside,
With healing hearts where sin had left a stain.

I thought I was a doctor…
And that I was born to heal,
But there’s a truth that I would finally see,
I thought I was a doctor,
But the Doctor that was real,
Had come to earth in order to heal me.





*Based on the life of Luke, the “Beloved Physician” (Colossians 4:14)


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Sharlyn Guthrie11/13/06
I enjoyed reading this. Your message is right-on. Keep up the good work!
Monique Fox11/13/06
Please post more of your poems at Poetry and Poets of God: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/poetryandpoetsofgod/
Marilyn Schnepp 11/14/06
From a non-poet reader, this would be called a really great poem. From a Poet's perspective - this has great thoughts and potential, but the meter and rhythm is off so that it doesn't flow smoothly. However, I did like the wonderful thoughts.
Edy T Johnson 11/16/06
I really like the way you have organized your poem. And, your message at the end is exquisite. Try (1)counting your syllables, to make sure every stanza comes out "even." And (2) read the poem outloud, exaggerating the rhythm, and I think you'll be able to see the few spots where you could tighten the meter and make this the masterpiece it promises to be. Keep writing!
david grant11/17/06
I thought you'd win a DAVEY for this, and you did! I like it.