The Official Writing Challenge
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11/13/06
Please post more of your poems at Poetry and Poets of God: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/poetryandpoetsofgod/
11/13/06
Wow, this is really good! I particularly like the bit about the fettered feet.
This is very good. The message is clear and it is very touching. Nicely done.
11/14/06
You have some EXCEPTIONAL imagery here, Dave! This is so wonderfully tender and true and comforting - like the Doctor Himself! Wonderful work!
11/15/06
This was very nice! I loved the flow of the poem, I and thank you for sharing it.
11/15/06
I agree with the great imagery you wrote into this piece. I think it would be even better reading if you only capitalized the beginning of your sentences, not lines, and if you kept all of the stanzas (other than the breaks) to the same number of lines. Well done.
Great poem Brother Dave!
11/16/06
I particularly liked this progression, Dave: By His blood, yes./By His wounds, of course./At cost too high for some, so true. yeggy