The Official Writing Challenge
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11/12/06
This was so vivid and engaging. I got a bit lost with what was going on, but it may have just been some distractions over here. I caught on fairly quickly once I could focus. Your description of your main character's feeling and thoughts was very engaging. Great writing!
11/16/06
An engrossing read. Your transitions into flash backs worked. You really engaged my emotions and made me care for both your MC and the mother and child.

11/16/06
Wow - so vivid. Your descriptions are powerful. Having spent a little time in the emergency department of a major Sydney hospital (as a carer, not a patient), I identify with the locked doors and need for security etc.

I suspect there is a touch of autobiography in there with the child with the teeth through his lip?!

This is a well-written tribute to those who risk their lives to bring health and healing.
11/16/06
Karen I enjoyed your descriptive writing so much. The first couple of paragraphs pulled me right in. Great writing!
02/16/08
You know, I'd love to read some more of your work.... You know how to make a reader feel stuff.