The Official Writing Challenge
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11/09/06
Good dialog and great analogies!

This story began to draw me in at the introduction of the character with "doctorphobia" and the explanation for how this started in his childhood. Also enjoyed the vivid description of the park preacher pelted with eggs. I'd like to see one of these colorful characters introduced at the story's opening...leading later on into the issue discussed by the main characters.
11/14/06
Creative and unique take on subject. Very interesting. My only suggestion: Wish you had written Scripture in Footnote...now I've got to go look it up. Nice job.