The Official Writing Challenge
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03/23/05
A really creative idea. I liked the descriptions of the two ships and how you had captured the characteristics of different personalities so well. I think the tlae needs to be tightened and tidied up. It is worth taking time to rewrite this as the idea is very clever.
03/23/05
I agree, very original idea with a lot of truth.
Kind of reminded me of Pilgrim's Progress. Great job of getting us to thinking. Thanks!
The word had that ability to rock and roll off the tongue; the imagery was elaborate here. It was both an intellectual read and yet a reader friendly read too. Good job
03/26/05
Such truth is woven within this tapestry of allegory. I loved how you incorporated subtle strands of poetry; adding to the fabric a unique cadence. A true delight to read! - Nancy