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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Missionary (10/19/06)

TITLE: Starssionaries
By david grant
10/24/06


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“Beam him up Scotty!”

The Captain is expectant. First contacts never cease to excite him.

A glitch in the ship’s audio and video system has made “shuttle” diplomacy necessary to set up today’s meeting. So he hasn’t seen or talked to the “alien” being transported.

An away-team reports the planet below is a lot like Earth; lush and green like South Carolina. Incredibly, English is spoken there too. The people are anxious to meet the captain and his crew.

"Captain, I think we got him. Please come to the reception room."

The captain leaves the bridge and heads for the turbo-lift.

The lift stops just outside the main reception room. Another “swish” and the Captain is inside looking for his contact, who’s not hard to find. He’s a head taller than the other aliens and ship’s officers around him and his short sandy gray hair shines like a beacon. The “alien” is dressed impeccably in what looks to be a dark-blue double breasted suit, white shirt, and red silk tie.

“Ah, Captain," exclaims the alien man, "Ah cain't tell you how glad ah am to meet yoo!"

He vigoriously shakes the captain's hand and then offers him a black leather bound book.

Oh?" says the captain. "Ho-ly Bi-ble."
"King James, sohn. The Authorized Version, red letter, genuine imitation cow hide cover too."
"Well, thank you, ah...."
“Just call me Billy, captain. Everybody does."
"Well, yes, Billy. Would you like to join me in the Captain's mess and ...."

Billy puts his hands on the captain's shoulders, leans over a little, and looks him in the eyes.

"Sohn, just tell me, when can I speak to your people?"
The captain takes a step back.
"Speak to my people?"

Billy smiles, slips an arm around the captain’s shoulders.
"Yes, sohn. This is what we came for, doncha you know? This is our purpose. What else would missionaries visit for but share the good Gospel with the troops?"

The captain takes another step backwards and hits a silent alarm button in his pocket.
"With MY troops?"

Billy steps forward and looks around the room.

"I hardly think this room is going to be large enough, do you? Have you got a room with a balcony?"
"A balcony?"
“Yup, and we are going to need a platform and a sound system. Can I recruit some of the be-livers among yuh to be ushers and counselors?"

The captain motions to his chief of security.
"I'm not sure I understand what you want to do?" he says.

Billy keeps smiling, puts his hands in his pants pockets, and rocks forward to whisper.

"Sohn, perhaps we DO need to talk first....Oh wait who is this comin' in the doar? Why its my orchestra ! Do I only see three accordionists? Somethin's not right, but Praise Gawd all things work for the good, you know!"

At the word "accordion" three security guards pull ray guns from their holsters.

"Suh?" exclaims Billy. "A assure you that my accordion players are all first chair!"

Suddenly the room fills with security people hustling aliens to the teleporter. In a moment the aliens are back on their planet and the captain is sighing in his chair on the bridge.

"Geesh, that was almost a disaster," he mumbles to himself. "Next time we negotiate on the planet!”

But there’s still that book in his hand.

“Well, Star Command is not going to allow me to just cut and run from this planet. I guess I better read this thing to find out what they are about.”

A voice hails the Captain again.
“Captain, we are being hailed by the planet below.”

Billy’s picture, shoulder’s up, appears on the 50 foot screen on the bridge, and on smaller screens all over the ship. His voice is booms out a message on every deck.

“Now friends, if you came with a loved one, they’ll wait. Let’s get every eye bowed and every head closed….”

“Cut it off!” shouts the Captain. “Battle stations. Battle stations. This is not a drill. We are under attack! Weapons Control! How quickly can I get a torpedo down to that planet?”

No answer.

“Weapons Control! Answer me!”

“Sir? Can this wait a moment. We are, uh, praying down here.”

“Arrrrrrgh!”

As the captain weeps in his chair, the sweet mixed sounds of an accordion trio and a single soloist waft through portals all over the vessel.

“Softly and tenderly, Jesus is calling…”


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dub W10/26/06
Well, there are some structure issues, but otherwise this is delightful, top to bottom. Thanks for your creative input.
Lynda Schultz 10/27/06
Imagine, Captain Kirk cowed! This was hilarious. Thanks.
Donna Haug10/28/06
That was hilerious. Very creative!
Joe Moreland10/30/06
Very funny! And, don't you know, Billy was just like that - whether he was talking to presidents, diplomats or a local shop owner. I love the way it was the "aliens" that had the truth and the "earthlings" who felt under attack by it. Isn't it so true? We are the aliens and earth is in our tractor beam. :)

Betty Castleberry10/31/06
This is really creative. I liked it. My favorite line:
"Suh?" exclaims Billy. "A assure you that my accordion players are all first chair!"
I giggled out loud when I read it.
Jan Ross10/31/06
What a HOOT! I'm chuckling outloud, my husband comes to the door to see what's going on. He reads it and is nearly in tears! Of course, he's a "trekie" from way back when! LOL Your imagination continues to amaze me -- you're so creative! My favorite line: “Now friends, if you came with a loved one, they’ll wait. Let’s get every eye bowed and every head closed….” I've heard pastors get mixed up like this and you captured the humanness of this alien! Great story! Absolutely hillarious!
Ruth Neilson10/31/06
You're out to get me in trouble aren't you, Dave? I'm reading this as I'm sitting with a class as they are watching a video, trying not to laugh.
Brilliant! There are some techical glitches--but over all...ROTFLOL!
william price10/31/06
Entertaining, Creative.
Four and a half Penguins for Bro. Dave!!!!
Stacey LaMontagne10/31/06
Very creative. I don't know what kind of comments you are looking for, but I did see a few things... "shoulder's up..." should be "shoulders up..." since its not a contraction its just plural, for instance.

It is a cute story. Lot's of laughs. Good job.

No penguin award needed. Just being nice. :)
Edy T Johnson 11/01/06
I've never been a Trekkie, so I wasn't sure I would figure out your story, but I followed the clues. And, I think the space ship actually found North Carolina (thinking it was a foreign planet) and that was THE Billy (Graham), always ready to give a reason for the hope that is in him! Did I get it right? Thanks for a fun story!
Keith Wallis11/01/06
This gets a "Wavey Davey" from this giggle-bound reader.
Sara Harricharan 11/01/06
Whoa! I totally loved this! You had me laughing all the way to the end-I especially liked the part with 'Scotty' beaming up Billy. This was an extremely creative take on the topic and a very well written one! Kudos!
Allison Egley 11/01/06
This was hilarious. I especially enjoyed the parts about the accordions.