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"My dad and Jesus." Powerful. I was surprised at the cops shoving her to the ground to handcuff her. Seemed a bit rough to deal with a 'hooker'. And then she was looking into the officer's eyes. But I liked the story. He treated her with respect and dignity which was exactly what she needed.
That last line, "my Dad and Jesus" says alot. Second generation cop and avid fan of Jesus plus a Christian who walks the walk and talks the talk. Great job when you can bring this reader to tears. Kudos.
I like the way you managed tough and tender - the language and the love. And that last line was priceless. Good job.
Yep, your last line was perfection! I wondered a bit if a Christian police officer, and a male at that, would put himself in the situation of ministering to a woman's cuts, etc., in a holding cell. Seems like a potentially tricky postition to put himself in, perhaps not realistic--but I know very little about police work, and am quite possibly in error. This is a very entertaining and moving story.
Yes. The last line was best line. Too bad this wasn't the first line. "My Dad and Jesus."
Great read, Marty. Characters were well drawn and their relationships with each other believable. Again, wonderful last line. Yeggy
Awesome, Marty! This was so well told, and I want to know MORE!!! Congrats on your EC win! It is well deserved.