The Official Writing Challenge
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I almost didn't read this, glad I did. A strong message, very well written.
I loved your message. I did find the sudden changes from the physical life to the 'visions' and back a little abrupt. However, I liked the comparison of old becoming new. Love the title.
At first it seemed so unrealistic - but some was a vision, I gather. A very intriguing encounter, almost like a sci-fi story, but spiritual. Mixed reactions, but loved the story and the outcome.
Great title and concept. I like the idea of the vision and suddenly changing church, life, etc.

I did think it was bit too tidy. 750 words is a tough limit, but I thought the dialogue could've been a bit more realistic--perhaps the character being unwilling to listen to change, to leave the new "friends" who "wanted" her.

Great overall message.