The Official Writing Challenge
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10/20/06
I can't imagine the horror some of these officers have to face. I would have liked a little more descriptiveness of the room they were in. Something to make me feel I was there too. I liked that the young officers feelings were very strong.
10/23/06
"Telling it like it is"! And yes, you showed us, the reader, how it was. All too true. All so sad, but Very well done! Written just As Is...with Nothing added.
10/23/06
Good story and well-written.
10/24/06
like this line. It just sticks in my head like a knife. "What passed for a smile crossed the Captain’s face. “Yea, that was some team.” He looked down at the bodies. Almost like he expected them to add something. "

DAV's FAV line of the week.