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This story has a smell of authenticity about it - you have believablely "got under the skin" of this character's motivations and thoughts. If I was being critical ... and I will be because this is posted in L4, the "moral" and the "theology" were just a little heavy handed. A slightly less "preachy" feel would have got your point across better---still, I'm not the one to talk! Thank you for sharing this.
10/22/06
This was very heavy. I like the descriptions, but it seemed rushed. Maybe if the pace and flow were changed.

Very interesting and definately creative.

10/23/06
Amen. Thank God for all of our public servants and families. I was glad the officer in your story survived. God bless.
Well written & very creative!