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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Police (10/12/06)

TITLE: Anxious Moments
By Laurie Glass
10/12/06


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Anxiety wells up inside,
Unsure of what is best to do.
Iíd truly rather run and hide
Than sit here feeling lost, confused.

I know I canít go back and change
Atrocities that I have done,
A pardon I cannot arrange,
The law I know I canít outrun.

In fear and trepidation wait
To be arrested by police,
For that is sure to be my fate,
Canít seem to get a momentís peace.

And sure enough, I hear a knock,
To entrance timidly I pace,
With trembling hands, the door unlock,
Embarrassed, stand here face to face.

ďPlease put your hands behind your back,
Must nip this problem in the bud,
The English language youíve attacked,
Youíre writing is as clear as mud.

Must keep your hands from penning more,
For unsuspecting victims read,
Not knowing what may be in store.
Your gibberish they do not need.Ē

With head hung low, cooperate,
Iím taken to the writerís jail.
Theyíll hold me here where I will wait.
Itís where they take you when you fail.

I have some time to really think
Behind confining iron bars.
And as I ponder in the clink,
I know Iím guilty of the charge.

I come before the judge in court,
Express my genuine remorse.
Am sentenced to receive support
And take another writing course.

With tears of gratitude I say
That Iíll be much more careful now.
Iíll proofread, edit, never sway,
With hand on Bible, this my vow.


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Marilyn Schnepp 10/19/06
From a Readers viewpoint-nifty & cute; from a Poets viewpoint - rhyme & meter off just a tad. Topic-wise, it is: 1)writers folly, 2)jail, 3)arrest and 4)anxiety; and "police" seems to be an afterthought. However, from a creative standpoint-Tops!
Linda Watson Owen10/19/06
Oh! What a delightfully cute and witty read! This shoots straight to each writer's (dare I say) 'gut'??! Haven't we all been there in this 'jail'? I think it's 'write on' in the police department...the word police are always breathing down our necks, aren't they?! Great job!
Pat Guy 10/19/06
This gave me such a chuckle! :) How original on the topic and I so enjoyed a fresh and humorous veiw.

Haven't we all felt like that?! Whew! You did a good job conveying how we sometimes feel come thursday morning! ;) *cringe, cringe*

VERY original, VERY creative and I VERY much enjoyed the chuckles!

Beth Muehlhausen10/19/06
Very clever and creative, not to mention funny, and a good choice for your FW audience!

I could envision stern, blue-coated policemen leading the offender:

"With head hung low, cooperate,
Iím taken to the writerís jail.
Theyíll hold me here where I will wait.
Itís where they take you when you fail."

But then I really had to snicker when I got to this part:

"I come before the judge in court,
Express my genuine remorse.
Am sentenced to receive support
And take another writing course."

Thanks for sharing what we all have felt in such a whimsical way. :-)






Donna Haug10/20/06
"The English language youíve attacked,
Youíre writing is as clear as mud."

Not in this case. It was clear and appropriate for this audience for sure!
Valora Otis10/21/06
This almost reminded me of a song at first. Then I remembered a time in history when there were people jailed for what they had written. I was swept up by my knowledge. This is a wonderful piece of poetry. Imaginative and on topic, creative and holds the readers attention. Very well done in my opinion.:-)
Peggy Bennitt10/21/06
And I'll be joining you there. This is too cute, and reflects how most of us feel when we've sent something off, via email or post. And there are times when we should be locked up! This is just great...and great fun as well! Kudos!!
dub W10/25/06
Absolutely cute - an enjoyable read.
Ann FitzHenry10/25/06
I love this! This is very creative and clever. Great, great work! I enjoyed it immensely. Thanks!
Amy Michelle Wiley 10/25/06
*chuckle* What a great poem! LOL! Well done.
Sara Harricharan 10/26/06
Writer's Jail. Lol! loved that-this is so creative!
Edy T Johnson 10/27/06
Oh, Laurie, this is delightfully clever! You had me going through the first half of your poem, and then the zinger which made me chuckle. I love such fun surprises, and you did it for me with your "Anxious Moments!"
Monique Fox11/13/06
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