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You have so effectively created the dreamlike feeling of confusion and stumbling in the human mind! That feeling of stumbling in the dark is perfectly related in your lines. I love the assonance and rhyme in 'slumber younger' and your use of alliteration in other places. Wonderful piece!
Yes - this is a work of art - and I enjoyed it. One to be read again.
The mysterious firefighter lives to fight again. Ultra exquisite and deep.
This was awesome! It could have so many meanings...someone disorientated because of being hurt in a fire, an unborn baby hoping to not be aborted, a spiritually lost and seeking person. Well done.
This poem is crafted so beautifully, I hardly know where to start, but I think that this is my favorite phrase: "Was I born just now,Or am I dying? Are these tears of joy, or am I crying
To be born AGAIN, and green?"
What comes to my mind with your ending is simply grace... Thanks for inspiring!
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