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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Fire-fighter (10/05/06)

TITLE: But One Escape
By J. C. Lamont
10/10/06


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Angry orange flames leapt through the room, incinerating everything in its path. Thick black smoke billowed from the windows as timber beams overhead disintegrated and crashed to the floor. Angie gasped for breath; smoke clouded her vision as hot tears stung her eyes.

Smoke spewed into the room from under the crack in the door. The walls blistered as the paint bubbled and streaked. She could hear the fire outside the door, overhead, behind the walls --cracking, hissing, popping.

Angie assumed it was an electrical fire; the old office building had always been the bunt of corporate jokes. Her mouth and throat were parched with gritty ash as she frantically gathered her files, backup drives, and notes that comprised her life’s work.

The sweltering room swam in and out of focus as she tore threw filing cabinets, struggling to cram everything she could into her briefcase. The windows behind her shattered, spraying slivers of glass across the room. Plumes of smoke stifled her screams as charred chunks of debris pummeled the floor.

She was going to die. Panic set in. Her heart hammered in her chest. Angie gagged for breath, choking on the ashy air. She could taste the noxious odor of melting plastic, scorched dry wall, and burning rubber.

Suddenly the office door splintered as an axe hacked through the wood and a fire fighter burst through the fractured remains of the door.

“The building is crashing down all around us!” he shouted over the tumult, extending his hand towards her. “Follow me.”

“Wait,” Angie cried. “I’m not ready yet.”

“There is no time!” he said. “The route, which I have forged, is the only way out.”

Angie rummaged through her desk drawers, her fingers searching for her portable hard drive. “Don’t you think that’s rather intolerant of you,” she said, “to claim there is only one way?”

“There is but one escape.”

Angie could barely see him now through the haze of smoke and flames. She tried to carry her over stuffed briefcase but the snaps burst open from the weight, spilling papers and documents all over the floor.

“Leave it behind,” the fire fighter said. “We must leave now!”

His voice was fainter as though the smoke had conjured a thick wall between them. For a moment, she hesitated and groped for his out stretched hand, but then scrambled to gather the fallen contents of her briefcase. “I don’t need you,” Angie said. “I will find my own way of escape.”




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No one comes unto the Father but by Me.” - Jesus (John 14:6)


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Suzanne R10/12/06
What a good parable. You've addressed the different senses well - the light, smell, gritty taste etc - you put your reader right in the scene.
Rebecca Livermore10/12/06
This is an excellent way to illustrate the truth of Jesus being the only way. Thanks for your creativity in dealing with a topic that is common among many in the world today.
Kristie Derksen10/12/06
Wow! What an amazing story! I love the parallel you did between Jesus and the firefighter. Even the girl's response that it is "intolerant" to say there is only one way. You have talent. I loved it!!!
Helen Paynter10/15/06
Excellent - a modern parable, gritty and hard-hitting, without any element of preaching or interpretation. It spoke very powerfully for itself. I hope this will see print in one form or another.
Amy Michelle Wiley 10/16/06
This brings out the foolishness of those who do not follow the one and only true Way. Great job! Good point.
Joanne Sher 10/18/06
This is wonderfully amazing and amazingly wonderful!! Awesome in every way. So effective on every level!!