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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Fire-fighter (10/05/06)

TITLE: The Water
By Laurie Glass
10/06/06


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Complacent,
sinful thoughts sneak in.
Unconcerned
where this may lead,
careless, distracted -
it isnít that bad.
DECEIVED!

Flammable indifference,
The Fire makes a subtle entrance.
Single spark -
unnoticed.
Soul set aflame.

The Fire
ignites a grudge,
kindles conceit,
fosters coals of contempt.
Soul transforms from vulnerable to vengeful,
preoccupied to pompous,
oblivious to vicious.
Resentment roars,
bitter words burn the tongue,
stench of spitefulness suffocates.
TRAPPED!

Flicker turns to flame,
embers to inferno,
spreading wildly,
singeing all in its path,
scorching unsuspecting victims.
HOPELESS!

The Fire cannot be fought alone!
Panting, pleading
for relief from fervent heat!
Longing for Liquid healing.

Drops begin to fall,
stifle The Fire,
smother the flames,
suppress its force.

The Water
cleanses carelessness,
washes unwise choices,
eradicates aloof attitude,
expunges jealousy,
squelches sin.
HOPE RESTORED!

The Water
gushes forth,
obliterates the blaze,
overpowers its passion,
stamps out its smolderings,
saturates the smoke.

Snuffed out,
The Fire is left choking -
no breath,
no air to fan the flames.
Suffocated,
The Fire surrenders.
The Water conquers!
VICTORY!


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Dolores Stohler10/12/06
Oh, this is good. Sends a powerful message. Nice work!
Susan Johnstone10/13/06
I like the style of this poem and the use of alliteration. It reads well.
Joanne Sher 10/13/06
Very powerful - I agree that the alliteration is extremely well-used in this. I definitely enjoyed this.
Linda Watson Owen10/14/06
Great job of using word sounds to make this free verse poem lyrical! I love how you used present tense to make it come alive on the page too! Great job dealing with a tough topic for poets!!
Beth Muehlhausen10/17/06
Yay - what an awesome application of the topic! This carried me along without any jerks or pauses...very fluid and powerful. Made me think...made me long for a deluge. :-)
Valora Otis10/18/06
I saw some significant parallels to a soul crying out and finally finding relief from so many sins of the natural man. Finding relief in the baptism that conquers the fire and brings victory and finally relief! I may be way off base about the meaning of this beautiful poem, but that's the beauty of poetry; it means something different to each reader. Bravo my friend!
Pat Guy 10/19/06
Wow! This is really GOOD! I enjoyed every word and I loved the progression of truth. Great work!
Ann FitzHenry10/19/06
Very powerful poem with a great message. I loved your use of all capital letters. It was very effective! Congratulations on your first entry in advanced. :-)
Dan Blankenship 10/21/06
Laurie,
A virtual masterpiece. Bravo and Amen!

Sincerely,
Dan Blankenship