The Official Writing Challenge
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Thank you for this story of redemption, and promised growth. The hope in this message will speak clearly to all who read it.

God bless,

Kevin
09/16/06
Like the way you wove the pruning in with the Sarah's journey. So sad that most churches don't cope well when 'different' looking people turn up on their doorstep - there's a lesson for me there. Watch out for the over use of 'she', four times in one sentence is a bit like overkill! :-) yeggy
09/18/06
Since this is Masters, we underclassmen can be picky; there is a "save" instead of "safe", and a thong instead of Throng...however, a neat little story about a plant being healed and also a young girl.
Enjoyed the symbolic imagery - nicely done. I also tripped over this: "she walked through the thong." although admittedly w/ a giggle. :-)
09/19/06
I love the hope that was so well portrayed here! Extremely well done! Very nice character development! Thanks for sharing it!
09/20/06
I love the intertwining of the Gardener with her struggles - it definitely made me read much more carefully than I might have. The ending is just wonderful. Sorry - can't find anything to be brutal about that hasn't already been mentioned!
09/20/06
I thank everyone for thier comments. Until recently, I had absolutely no idea my spelling was so horrid - rofl. This will surely be the next thing I try and teach myself.
09/20/06
The two narratives worked well side by side – understanding the one through reading the other. It was a clever way of shedding light on the woman’s story. It is a shame that it was mere clothes that prevented the her from going to church.